I'd like feedback on my article: To Improve Sexual Power.

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   Tabith Awalposted 2 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: To Improve Sexual Power. (must be signed in to view)

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   FatFreddysCatposted 2 years ago

   "Adult" subjects like these don't usually fly around here. HubPages (which you have misspelled as "habpages" in your bio) generally prefers to keep things family-friendly.
   
   That aside... the English is awkward throughout. What the heck is a "predicament basin?" There's also a particularly crude anatomical term (i.e. "pussy").
   
   The reference to "inhaling air from the anus" is confusing, potentially disturbing, and unintentionally hilarious.
   
   "Stimulating Groin Tubes" would be an excellent band name.
   
   I have no idea what "After the silence of the entry, God notes dantian" is supposed to mean.
   
   I could go on, but you get the idea. There is no way that this will pass quality assessment in its current state.

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      chef-de-jourposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      FFC...you're a brave man to go where others might fear to tread. BUT...you two should get together and create a ComicBlog based on his articles and your advice. Hilarious combo.

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      drylenposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Had a good laugh at your advice. I also noticed that the hubber score is commonly used for a sexual act haha

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   Rochelle Frankposted 2 years ago

   FatFreddysCat.. this is the most amusing advice I have ever read in reply to the weirdest article I have ever seen. I have a weird case of the giggles over both. Thanks.

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   Tabith Awalposted 2 years ago

   How can I write a better hab? Pls advise me.

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      theraggededgeposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      To write a better 'hab', you have to improve your English.
      
      This is an English-based site, so articles have to be well-written and grammatically correct.

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         Tabith Awalposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you for your better solutio.

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   Tabith Awalposted 2 years ago

   Pls, Don't insult me. I am a new haber and my mother language is not Einglish. I am trying to write a better hab. If it is impossible, no problem.

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      theraggededgeposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Go up to the top of this page and click 'Chronological'. It will help you see who is replying to whom.

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      CYong74posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      I'm sorry to say this. HP is a revenue earning site that needs writers to at least be able to write in clean English. It is not an English learning site.
      
      If you can't even spell Hub and English properly, you really do not have the language skills needed. You shouldn't waste your time.

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      OldRosesposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      No one is insulting you.  I know that you didn't mean it that way but the phrases you have used in your hub (not "hab") are hilarious to English speakers.  You need to improve your English skills before you can write and be published on this site.

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         Tabith Awalposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you.

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