I'd like feedback on my article: Jogging to keep fit, strong and healthily

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   Miebakagh57posted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Jogging to keep fit, strong and healthily. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      greenmindposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      There is a lot here, and a lot of the English is not quite right, but this line caught my attention:
      "The minimum jogging time for any jogging workout is 45 minutes for a distance less than half a mile. For a distance at least a mile is 1 hour 35 minutes. This is in agreement with sports medicine."
      Here's the problem: If you or I took an hour and 35 minutes to go one mile we would look like statues. A slow walk is two miles an hour, more than twice as fast as your "sports medicine" jogging pace. Can you fix this?

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         Miebakagh57posted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Hello greenmind, you are most welcomed.
         First, your remark on my English is well noted; and I am taking serious steps to improve it.
         Let's say I jog from point A to point B 50 yards and back to point A, is it 100 yards or 50 yards? I need a specific answer here, and I am expecting your response and at your convenience.
         Seriously, as certain English speaking countries in the third world are concerned, it would be 50 yards or one lap.
         Okay, as you point out a slow walk is two miles an hour. Some persons like me can beat this distance to one hour!. Is my sports medicine right or wrong?!
         It is the practice and training.
         If you native English speakers take it to be 100 yards, I am learning. I will go on improving my English.
         You are always welcome to input your criticism whether positive or otherwise on my hubs.
         Once again, thanks and welcome visiting.

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Please change the title to "Jogging To Keep Yourself Strong and Healthy," It'll look better on Google.
      
      I'm no expert, but most of your english is messed up.
      
      Also, an average jog takes 5-10 minutes to burn calories (depending on several factors). An average jog is also 4-5 mph.
      
      Also, Jogging is a "slow, leisurely sport" not a "slow leisurely sport".
      
      Just follow their advice, and your article will be just fine, although it might take several edits.

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         Miebakagh57posted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Hi Ivan Hermandez, thank you for visiting.
         I'll apply all your suggestions.

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   FatFreddysCatposted 6 years ago

   Title should be "Strong and Healthy," not "Healthily."

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      Miebakagh57posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi FatFreddyCat, welcome and thank you.
      I will apply it.

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   theraggededgeposted 6 years ago

   "Terminal diseases like prostate and breast cancer in men and women respectively will be reduced."
   
   Firstly, neither of those are necessarily terminal.
   
   Secondly, you have to back up your claims with medical evidence.
   
   Thirdly, men also get breast cancer.

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      Miebakagh57posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi theraggeddge, welcome once again.
      Regarding terminal disease, I check an online dictionary, wordweb. It says:"An impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning."
      Yes, I agreed men also get breast cancer. But it is most common with women, right?
      With all the advise, encouragement, suggestions from hubbers and HubPage editors I"m getting and applying all reasonable suggestions, this hub will soon be featured.
      Thanks and you are always welcome to visit,critize and input your suggestions.

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         theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Hi Miebakagh,
         
         "Terminal illness is an incurable disease that cannot be adequately treated and is reasonably expected to result in the death of the patient within a short period of time. This term is more commonly used for progressive diseases such as cancer or advanced heart disease than for trauma. In popular use, it indicates a disease that will soon progress until death with near absolute certainty, regardless of treatment."
         
         Both breast and prostate cancer can be treated so are not incurable. A diagnosis of either does not mean that it is terminal. Terminal comes from the Latin, terminus: the end.
         
         Yes, breast cancer is more prevalent in women, but your previous statement indicated that it is exclusively so. You could leave out the reference to men and women altogether. You've edited it now, so it's a little better.
         
         It's really important to back up any claims you make regarding medical conditions with current evidence. What if someone declined to get medical advice because of what you wrote? You have to cover yourself. So what evidence do you have that those cancers are reduced if people jog? If you have a reputable source, then add it.
         
         I looked at the American College of Sports Medicine. I couldn't see anything that says that jogging reduces breast and prostate cancer. What they say is that regular, low impact exercise will help. That would be walking and stretching, yoga, ellipticals, etc. Not jogging, which is high impact.
         
         http://www.acsm.org/public-information/ … -treatment
         
         So in your list of benefits, you need to link to sources for each of your claims.
         
         This may help you: https://www.cancer.gov/about-cancer/cau … fact-sheet
         
         You cannot say that vegetarians have stronger bones than the rest of the population without offering evidence.
         
         Your title should be capitalised properly, "Jogging to Keep Yourself Fit, Strong, and Healthy"
         
         Who is your audience? If you are hoping to get readers from all over the world, you might think about changing some mentions of 'chop plate' to 'meal' or 'dinner'. People are more used to the term, 'a balanced meal'.
         
         Hope that helps.

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   Miebakagh57posted 6 years ago

   Hello theragededge, you are again welcomed.
   As you realize, I am still editing the hub when you respond.
   All the links as evidence I removed since Marven"s take over.
   However, I have provided another medical link.
   One of your links is a bad gateway.
   By now, ACSM has removed the link that jogging reduced both breast and prostate cancer in men and women.
   I will go to twitter and get one later for re-editing the hub.
   I will soon fine polish it.
   Thanks for your patience and suggestions. You are always welcomed.

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Both my links work fine
      
      What has Maven (not Marven) got to do with it? The takeover has nothing to do with adding resources. HP has required for a long time that any medical claims are backed up with reliable evidence.
      
      Twitter?

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Twitter is not a reliable source unless it comes from expert doctors. HP has worked with Maven for months, and I see no issue. I hope your article gets featured soon. As theraggededge said, sloppy articles don't get featured unless it has the bare minimum of 700 words and one image.

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         theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Erick, the hub has plenty of words. And it's definitely not 'sloppy'
         
         Just needs a little work, that's all. I'm sure it will do very well.

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            Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            I know. I was just kidding. Her article will be featured soon.

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               theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               I'm pretty sure that Miebakagh is a 'he'

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                  Miebakagh57posted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  @Ivan & theragededge, more accurately, Miebakagh57 is his! I am male.
                  Miebaka is my first name. A female can take the same name.
                  Miebakagh57 is my HubPages ID.
                  Thank you all for your positive contributions.

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                     Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                     Oops. Mistaken identity. Sorry.

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                        Miebakagh57posted 6 years agoin reply to this

                        Hello Ivan, not at all, please.

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                  Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  I should've looked at his profile picture. I'm sorry. I was on my playstation 3 when I typed into the system.

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                     Miebakagh57posted 6 years agoin reply to this

                     Hi Ivan, we are all human. And, we can err.
                     You are always welcomed visiting.

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                        Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                        Thank you. I appreciate it.

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                           Miebakagh57posted 6 years agoin reply to this

                           Ivan, its okay, now.

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                              Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                              Thank you. I really enjoyed having you on HubPages. You're English may be underwhelming, but I can understand your intentions clearly. You are a kind African male who cares about everybody. I admire that. So, I guess we just made ourselves a new friendship, OK? Until next time?

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   Miebakagh57posted 6 years ago

   Thank you Ivan, and rightly.

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