I'd like feedback on my article: 7 ways to improve your mental condition

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  1. kristoph profile image45
    kristophposted 7 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article 7 ways to improve your mental condition (must be signed in to view).
    I just extended the article, added more pictures, changed the title and made some other minor changes but it still can't pass Quality Assessment Process.
    What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. AliciaC profile image98
    AliciaCposted 7 months ago

    Hi, kristoph. I don't know why your article hasn't passed the Quality Assessment Process, but I have some ideas. The title of your hub should be written in title case. In addition, when it's so easy to find adult coloring pages online, I don't think a link to a specific web page is necessary.

    Another thing that I think might be a problem is the way in which you've titled and worded the article. Your suggestions sound good to me, but I'm not a mental health professional. Based on what I read on your profile, you aren't, either. I think we need to be careful about saying that we have advice to help people with their mental condition or health when we aren't professionals. At the very least, I think you need references and some kind of disclaimer. It will be interesting to see what other people think.

  3. Stacy Vizcarrondo profile image82
    Stacy Vizcarrondoposted 7 months ago

    Just asking is this personal or professional  point of view? Eather way its great to hear both sides .  I found your arrival helpful so I'd  like to say thank you.

    1. kristoph profile image45
      kristophposted 7 months agoin reply to this

      Actually, it is a mix of personal and professional knowledge:) I'm very glad that you like it.

  4. Gregory DeVictor profile image97
    Gregory DeVictorposted 7 months ago

    Hello Kris:

    You wrote:

    “Do you eat products with high nutritional values and avoid highly processed food?
    Do you prepare your meals at home or do you eat more often in bars and restaurants?
    Do you read labels with ingredients on products?“

    You should remove the italics from these three sentences.

    I don’t believe that you need to number your section headings.

    I believe that you should remove the advertising capsule that is near the beginning of the article. It just looks too promotional right at the beginning.

    You wrote:

    “You do not even have to attend a gym, you can train yoga inside the comforts of your home. It is because you can download several free apps that can help you kick-start your meditation routine right away. You can also easily find a lot of relevant materials on YouTube. However, training in a group has many advantages and if you have such a possibility, try joining the yoga trainings in your city.”

    This paragraph needs to be edited. For example, your first sentence could read:

    You do not even have to attend a gym because you can do yoga training inside the comfort of your home.

    1. kristoph profile image45
      kristophposted 7 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you for your valuable feedback. I introduced your suggestions but I'm not sure what you mean writing:
      "I believe that you should remove the advertising capsule that is near the beginning of the article. It just looks too promotional right at the beginning."
      Which capsule is advertising in your opinion?

  5. Venkatachari M profile image29
    Venkatachari Mposted 7 months ago

    Kristoph, You have not yet changed the title to the required style. Each word in titles should start with a capital letter that are of more than 3 letters.

    Give a heading to the introductory paragraph and make it more interesting like the importance for maintaining a mental balance with more elaboration of the need for mental control and management.

    List the seven steps in a separate paragraph after the introductory paragraph.

    Then, you put each step as a separate paragraph and explain it appealingly. Do not put the numbers for these paragraphs.

    You can add one more summary of the general guidance as a separate para at the end.

    And look at the points mentioned by Gregory and others to make the changes in the text.

    No need for the link to coloring book. You should link your advice to some mental guidance articles that are supported by expert advice or medical websites.

  6. Gregory DeVictor profile image97
    Gregory DeVictorposted 7 months ago

    The one near the beginning of your article.

    1. theraggededge profile image98
      theraggededgeposted 7 months agoin reply to this

      That may be ad placement by HubPages. There's no Amazon capsule there.

  7. kristoph profile image45
    kristophposted 7 months ago

    I introduced most of your suggestions and the article was rejected again. It's really frustrating and I really don't know what can I do more?

  8. Beth Eaglescliffe profile image99
    Beth Eaglescliffeposted 7 months ago

    You could try doing the following:

    Remove the link to coloring pages.
    Attribute all your photos (make sure they are free to use).
    The whole article is too general. Add your personal experience of trying each of the stress-relieving methods.
    Add a relevant bio specific to the article showing your expertise or experience of the subject.
    Add some scientific references to back up each of the 7 methods you are advocating. 

    EDIT: I've just checked you website - the link to coloring pages is to your own website. Self-promotion is not allowed on HubPages. That alone is enough to prevent your article passing QAP.

 
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