Can someone tell me how can I improve my article: "How to play Jhin"?

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   BattleBossposted 4 years ago

   Hey there, Hubbers. I'm new here and just want to put my expertise into use. Can someone please tell me why does my article keep on failing the Quality Assessment Process? Please read it and give a feedback, thanks! Here it is: https://discover.hubpages.com/games-hob … rief-Guide

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   AliciaCposted 4 years ago

   I know you’ve written this article for the gaming community, but I really think you need to start the article with an introduction to Jhin. Your first section (and most of the article) was a complete mystery to me. I’m not a gamer, but I think an introduction would be useful even for people who do play computer games. If you write an introduction, readers who have never played the game may be more interested in your article.
   
   You need to avoid words like “lemme” and “gonna” and write them properly. You also need to remove the spaces in the article. You could use separate text capsules with subtitles to organize your text. You should also proofread the article in order to find and correct a few grammatical and capitalization errors.
   
   I wonder about the longevity of the article. You mention “this season.” Does that mean that the information won’t be accurate after the season has finished? That’s not a good basis for an article, unless you intend to update it regularly.
   
   Another point to consider is the license of the images. Do they have a suitable license for use on this site, or do you have permission to use them? You need to indicate this in the correct areas in the photo capsule.

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      BattleBossposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      That is one sick feedback. Thank you so much, ma'am. And, um, this "season" of the game has brought so much change to the mechanics of the game. It's been the biggest change ever since, and analysts and pros expect this 'change' to last. And even if there is a sudden change, yes, I plan on updating it regularly. Every single thing that changes in the game is something worth the attention, that's why gamers always want updated guides. And, um, I didn't know i should write in a clean verbatim format. Ma'am, thank you so much for the advice. Thank youuu

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