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   Alyssa Williams writesposted 3 years ago

   https://discover.hubpages.com/business/ … Operations

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      OldRosesposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      HubPages is not a blogging platform, so replace "blogger" with "writer" in your bio.  Your article is too short.  It should be at least 1,000 words.  Your English needs polishing.  You have many grammatical errors.  Your photos need to be properly captioned with the licensing information.  You can only use photos that are licensed for free use.  You cannot use photos that you have stolen from other sites.
      
      I suggest that you spend some time carefully reading the articles in the Learning Center which you can access by clicking on the Help button in the upper right corner of your screen.  The Learning Center will tell you everything that you need to know to write successful articles on Hubpages.

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         Alyssa Williams writesposted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you for honest and valuable feedback.

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   Stephen Tomkinsonposted 3 years ago

   Hi Alyssa.
   The content is good and informative. Perhaps you should work a little on the style. A good idea would be to have a friend read through what you write before you publish.
   Sometimes we can be a little too close to our work. I, for example, am always writing run-on sentences that seem to continue forever with little punctuation that confuse the reader who doesn't know what I'm going on about (this is an example!).
   good luck with future articles. If I can be of any help, let me know.
   Steve

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   Alyssa Williams writesposted 3 years ago

   I shall work on the writing style. Thank you for the feedback.

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   psycheskinnerposted 3 years ago

   I think you need to consider who your audience is and speak directly to them.  Actual business owners are a small audience ad most of them will either already know about these tools or be so behind the times they can't understand your article.
   
   I would suggest going for a broader audience and making it easier for them.  For example a title like "Online technologies to improve your business productivity: an overview"
   
   An introduction would say you should be doing all of these things so people know to skip over the ones they are already doing and look for ones they aren't.  In each section say what the tool does better than older lower-tech options.  Cover how to implement it on an individual, team, or company-wide basis. This will cover one-person businesses like freelancers as well as employees in addition to business owners.
   
   If the article is popular you can then build out pages going more in-depth on each topic.

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      Alyssa Williams writesposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for taking the time to give descriptive feedback. This will help me to write from a reader's perspective and provide valuable content.

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