I'd like feedback on my article: Coins with a Spiritual Significance

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   Blackspaniel1posted 21 months ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Coins with a Spiritual Significance

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      theraggededgeposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      Okay, I'm going through it.
      
      Remove the image of the book right at the beginning and replace with a legal image of the kind of coins you are referring to.
      
      It's missing a proper introduction. Explain to the reader what the article is about. What do you mean by 'spiritual coins'? I don't think coins with a religious theme are necessarily spiritual. You've only included Christian coins--aren't there others?
      
      "and Israel to ossue such coinage". Ossue or issue?
      
      I recommend splitting the videos up with relevant text between them.
      
      You also need to explain about the book. Why do you recommend it? What did you get from reading it? Why is it important for your reader? Simply dumping an Amazon capsule in won't work. It is much better for you to write about it in detail and include an inline link. If you haven't read it, it shouldn't be there.
      
      Same with the other Amazon link, whatever it is - you don't explain.
      
      Your lists are too spaced out.
      
      I've got to the comments and it becomes obvious that this is an old Squidoo 'lens'. If you are able to delete those dated comments, then do so. It looks to me as if this was one of the ones transferred to HP from Squidoo. Unfortunately, the formatting and requirements have changed a lot since then.
      
      It's a long and interesting article, but it requires a lot of work to bring it up to the standard required.
      
      Definitely more photos of the coins

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   Rupert Taylorposted 21 months ago

   Your article needs a thorough proofreading. In skipping through I found a couple of issues.
   
   "These spiritual significant coins originate from a myraid of nations." Should be
   
   These spiritually significant coins originate from myriad of nations.
   
   "Often Andorra coins are not round, but shaped as though they are miniture pieces of art." Should be
   
   Often Andorran coins are not round, but shaped as though they are miniature pieces of art.
   
   Using the free program Grammarly will catch some of these errors.
   
   Also, there is far too much white space; you need to close up gaps between sentences or lists.

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   MariaMontgomeryposted 21 months ago

   I offer this critique in an effort at constructive criticism. I hope it is received as such.
   
   In the 4th line of the 2nd paragraph, change “ossue” to “issue”. At the end of the 6th line of the same paragraph, you began a sentence with the conjunction, “but”. Don’t do that.
   
   In the list entitled “Windows of Heaven”, remove some of the blank space. Do the same with the next list of items. The farther into the article I read, the larger the blank white space became. White space is important, but this is overkill.
   
   Under “The Abbeys of Austrian Coinage” you mention, …St. Paul im Lavanttal….”  Is the “im” a typo, or is it a language with which I am not familiar?
   
   Under the heading, “Belarus Honors Orthodox Saints”, you wrote, “Belarus, has, through the…” Remove the coma after Belarus, so the sentence reads, “Belarus has, through the…”
   
   I stopped reading after this point.

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   Blackspaniel1posted 21 months ago

   Thanks all, the problem is resolved.  It is now featured.

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