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  1. John Patrick Lee profile image44
    John Patrick Leeposted 2 years ago

    I would like to seek help or if someone can provide feedback regarding one article that I would like to submit to TouchNickel.

    They provided feedback about the photos, grammar and having evergreen content.  I was able to fix the photos and removed photos with watermarks. 

    Hope someone can read through and see if my grammar is worthy as I did not see any errors after editing.  Also am not sure with the evergreen content.

    The article title is "The Best Passive Income Idea for an average-income Filipino"

    1. AliciaC profile image95
      AliciaCposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      I think you need to organize your article and eliminate some passages. Dividing the article into more sections, each with their own subtitle, should be helpful. Eliminating passages which aren't essential should also be helpful. I noticed that you list things that you don't describe, which doesn't seem like a good idea when finances are involved.

      You should proofread the article again because it contains a few errors. You should also indicate that all the images have the correct license for use on this site.

      It might be a good idea to indicate that your suggestions could be helpful for people in other countries. Having "Filipino" in the title could be a drawback because people from other countries may not read your article.

      1. John Patrick Lee profile image44
        John Patrick Leeposted 2 years agoin reply to this

        Thank you for providing feedback.  I initially wrote the article using the tutorial template in HP that got it featured.  I was not aware that utilizing the template would be an obstacle to getting it in TouchNickel.

        I will review the article again to see if there are things listed which were not discussed.

    2. WriterJanis profile image80
      WriterJanisposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Hi John!
      I agree with Alicia about dividing your article into more sections and making sure your images have the correct license for use in your article. You should also credit each image and have an image at the beginning of your article. Evergreen content is content that will always be useful. Good luck!

      1. John Patrick Lee profile image44
        John Patrick Leeposted 2 years agoin reply to this

        Thank you for providing feedback.  Will work on this and re-write.

  2. theraggededge profile image77
    theraggededgeposted 2 years ago

    I would say that you are literally excluding global readership by your focus on the Philippines. Most of your concepts and suggestions apply to the rest of the world yet they won't bother reading because you have narrowed your titles. I suggest you widen your potential readership instead.

    1. PaulGoodman67 profile image68
      PaulGoodman67posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      I wonder if it may have better potential to be seen, though, with the Filipino reference. It might be like having a longtail keyword phrase and get a niche audience.

      Most make-passive-income articles just get lost in the swamp if they're aimed at a general audience. It's generally not a topic area that I would go near because it's so saturated.

      1. theraggededge profile image77
        theraggededgeposted 2 years agoin reply to this

        Maybe. I thought that as I posted the comment. Then I wondered how it would go down if someone substituted 'Welsh person' with 'Filippino' big_smile But then the population of each is vastly different.

        And no, I wouldn't tackle that kind of topic either.

        1. PaulGoodman67 profile image68
          PaulGoodman67posted 2 years agoin reply to this

          You're right that scale matters when it comes to audiences.

          I think HP generally expect writing to be aimed at the US/general readers.

          I gave up on writing anything specifically aimed at the UK years ago.

    2. John Patrick Lee profile image44
      John Patrick Leeposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the feedback. I will revise the article and make it target a global audience.

  3. SherrellJWhitfield profile image77
    SherrellJWhitfieldposted 2 years ago

    I was thinking the same thing about your title and not limiting your audience
    As soon as I read the title I thought. "Oh, well this information isn't offered to me."

  4. SherrellJWhitfield profile image77
    SherrellJWhitfieldposted 2 years ago

    I was thinking the same thing about your title and not limiting your audience
    As soon as I read the title I thought. "Oh, well this information isn't offered to me." As a result, I wouldn't have read it. It's a great idea to open it up

 
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