My article has been rejected, but it is not clear why.

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   Abhi Gaurposted 21 months ago

   Can you help identify the issues with the following article?
   
   https://discover.hubpages.com/games-hob … s-under-30

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      CYong74posted 21 months agoin reply to this

      I note that you have similar articles that are featured. So I presume removing the bold print would greatly help.
      
      Do take note, though, you're writing for an international audience . So it's important and professional to state the currency. 1 US dollar is quite a bit more than 1 Australian dollar. To enhance your credibility, you ought to also state where these games are available at these prices, even if it's obvious to most PS gamers.
      
      As for your respective descriptions of the games, personally, I don't have any issues with the over-enthusiastic tone. That seems the usual for most gaming articles. But to befit your title, you might want to write more on why these titles are more worthy of that 30 bucks than other discounted titles. After all, the PS store has so many below-30-bucks title on sale each day.

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         Abhi Gaurposted 21 months agoin reply to this

         Thank you for your insights. I agree with everything you have said and will try to make changes accordingly.

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         Kenna McHughposted 21 months agoin reply to this

         Geek, Great advice!

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            CYong74posted 21 months agoin reply to this

            Thanks, Kenna.

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   Rupert Taylorposted 21 months ago

   "Heart-pounding," "buckle up," "jaw-dropping".
   
   There's an overabundance of worn out cliches such as these. Also, the frequent use of bold face is a turn off for readers.
   
   Because of these issues, I didn't get far into the article before bailing. I suspect the HubPages editors feel the same way.

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      Abhi Gaurposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you for you reply. I will try and address these issues.

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   AliciaCposted 21 months ago

   I didn’t read your article in detail, but there’s another problem in it. The article contains far too much bold print. In my opinion, bold should only be used for a word or short phrase that you want to emphasize, such as saying that a specific liquid is toxic.

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      Abhi Gaurposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you

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   theraggededgeposted 21 months ago

   I agree with Rupert and Linda. As well as too much bold text and shouty cliches, there are also too many exclamation marks.
   
   Enthusiasm is good but not to the detriment of useful information. There is not enough detailed description of the gameplay.
   
   You should include the publishers' names and any other relevant info (publish date, etc.).
   
   Oh, and don't use 'we'. The article is written by a single person, not a team, so don't pretend to be one
   
   It could be a useful piece with a bit of work.

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      Abhi Gaurposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the insightful reply. I think your points are fair and will help in editing the article.

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         theraggededgeposted 21 months agoin reply to this

         Glad to help. Let us know in this thread once you have made some changes.

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   Kenna McHughposted 21 months ago

   It sounds like you're selling these games. If you peruse similar HP articles, they describe how to win or get to the next level. I think HP wants the article to be unique without the punchy content.

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      Abhi Gaurposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      That is a good point Kenna.

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