I'd like feedback on my article: Building a Budget-Friendly Mini Gym at Home...

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   jericho911posted 7 weeks ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks! I don't understand what makes it spammy. It's all about my own experiences, with my own photos.
   Here is my article: Building a Budget-Friendly Mini Gym at Home For Under $75

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      theraggededgeposted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      A couple of things...
      
      You need a proper introduction. A lead-in to the article explaining what it is about.
      
      Get rid of those awful bold text images. Use captions under the photos instead.
      
      Make sure you mention the brand of the items in the article text.
      
      Personally, I prefer in-line Amazon links but I believe we are being advised to go back to the capsules now. Add (or move) some descriptive text into the capsule itself.
      
      There is a video capsule you can use for actual YouTube videos. Delete that horrible-looking screenshot.
      
      Remove the self-promotional links at the end.
      
      The end is a bit spammy, I'm afraid, I'd advise replacing the product and Prime stuff with a conclusion. You want to place the emphasis on a home gym and not the products.
      
      Right now, the page looks crude and unprofessional, like a cheap blog. Focus on refining it and making it look more like the articles here: https://dengarden.com because that's probably where you'd like it to end up.
      
      Hope that helps.

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   jericho911posted 7 weeks ago

   Thanks. I appreciate the detailed feedback.  I'll visit the problem areas and work on that right away.  It's awesome to get such strong advice.

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      theraggededgeposted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

      I think it's just a bit 'in your face'. Revert to the standard formatting as detailed in the Learning Center and it will be much better.

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         jericho911posted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

         I just completed it, making changes to your suggestions.  You were 100% right.  It really was a sloppy mess. I appreciate your honesty about what I needed to you.  You also gained a follower !

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            theraggededgeposted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

            Wow! So much better. I'm sure it is worthy of moving to Dengarden.
            
            Thank you for your kind words.

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   Rupert Taylorposted 7 weeks ago

   How refreshing to see someone seeking advice and reacting so positively to it when it is freely and expertly given.

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      PaulGoodman67posted 7 weeks agoin reply to this

      Yes, it seldom happens!

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