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Critique my hubbing/writing

  1. Evan Hutchinson profile image77
    Evan Hutchinsonposted 7 years ago

    Okay, so I posted my longest hub recently, my hub about Air Force BMT/Basic Training. It's the one I've taken the most seriously, even though I have taken my others seriously. But this one, being the most personal of my experiences, is the one I put the most passion into. Can I get a few critiques/opinions on how I did at it?

    1. climberjames profile image57
      climberjamesposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Looks good to me Evan, perhaps break up the middle a little with a few more photos?

      Also you could use the link suggestion tool which would boost your Hub Karma smile

  2. lrohner profile image82
    lrohnerposted 7 years ago

    Looks and sounds good. I would break up your sections into different text capsules and throw a couple of photos in there for good luck. I would also get rid of the first two sentences. You only have a few seconds to grab a reader's attention, so better to spend it imparting information than asking questions. I would start with "The US Air Force is a great thing...".

    And watch your URLs in the future. Your current URL is http://hubpages.com/hub/All-about-Air-F … kland-AFB, while it should have been something simple like http://hubpages.com/hub/join-the-air-force or something like that.

    But great work...really!!

  3. Aiden Roberts profile image82
    Aiden Robertsposted 7 years ago

    Completley agree the text needs breaking up maybe photo or video would be useful.
    Great hub though shsame I am too old to join.
    Well done