Please let me know your thoughts on this hub!

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   ponxposted 13 years ago

   Hi all,
   I did incorporate some changes to my hub after getting very useful comments from fellow Hubbers.Thank you all.Please let me know what you think of this one.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Visiting-Las-Ve … mple-Guide

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      Rochelle Frankposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Looks like a lot of good suggestions and well organized. I think your content and presentation is great.
      
      I would move the part about sharing  on Facebook, Twitter, etc. and the RSS feed much further down-- even to the bottom-- you don't want people clicking away from your page before they have hardly started  reading-- In fact, I would probably only mention using the share button.
      
      Your paragraphs are long. (I know this doesn't fit the usual Eng. comp. rules, but newspaper or magazine style usually has short --even one or two sentence) paragraphs because it is easier on the eyes to have 'white space' breaks rather than a solid blocks of type.
      
      Your map capsule has not been edited to put in the content you really want... maybe  you can look up the tutorial, or just try again by going to edit mode, and editing the Map capsule to include the addresses you want to point out in Las Vegas.
      
      Over good job, just needs a few 'tweaks".

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         ponxposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you for all your feedback. Trying hard to present good hubs :-).

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            ponxposted 13 years agoin reply to this

            Rochelle...Got the map capsule bit!Thanks for pointing that out.

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      ofmelancholyposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      nice hub.

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   lrohnerposted 13 years ago

   You've done a really good job of imparting information. Nice job.
   
   I would caution against using the same word over and over and over. For instance, you use Las Vegas three times in the first three sentences. How about "the city" or "sin city" or anything else.
   
   You're asking for feedback and to share the hub right after the first paragraph. It should be at the end of the hub.
   
   You use "las vegas" in each one of your tags, I believe. Try to use different words like I stated above.
   
   Other than that, job well done!

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      ponxposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you Irohner. All the info given by you on my previous question was very useful and so are these. Trying to keep all the suggestions in mind while writing.

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   Cagsilposted 13 years ago

   Hey Ponx,
   
   Your second and third text capsules have a lot of text bunched together. Try to keep your reader's attention, by giving them smaller paragraphs to read.
   
   If you give them huge paragraphs, those with a short attention span, will just click out of your hub.
   
   Other than that. It's a great job.

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      ponxposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Hey Casgil.Thanks for returning to read my hub.Yes the short attention span is a great tip because most people like to skim through the contents.

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         Cagsilposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         You're welcome.

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   SteveoMcposted 13 years ago

   You must be editing like crazy, I thought that the hub was very well done.   Lot's of good information.  Things placed nicely. 
   
   Nice job overall.

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      ponxposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Yes in fact I was . Thank you.
      The feedback that I received from everyone was very helpful so I put them all to use.

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