I'd like feedback on my Hub: The tomato with more Lycopene

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   Canita Proposted 8 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub The tomato with more Lycopene. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      1. Your hub needs a proper introduction. It sort of launches into a description of the ideal tomato which is a bit confusing. Tell the reader what the hub is about and why it needed to be written.
      
      2. Part of the article appears to be advertising a particular supplier. HP doesn't want Hubs to be advertisements.
      
      HTH
      
      Edit: I noticed you wrote 'highbred'... do you mean 'hybrid'? You also say that those tomatoes are naturally low in fat - as far as I know, there's no fat in any tomato on the planet.

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         calculus-geometryposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         Fun fact, tomatoes actually have a small amount of fat in them, about 0.25 grams.

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            theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

            I stand corrected

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         Canita Proposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you.  I meant hybrid.

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      Kylyssaposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      The article lacks focus, skipping back and forth between generalized information about tomatoes, information about your preferences in tomatoes, off-topic information about hothouse tomatoes versus field-grown tomatoes, and a few short bits about the tomatoes that are higher in lycopene. It really doesn't deliver what was promised by the title in a way that would be satisfying to a reader seeking information about varieties of tomatoes that are higher in lycopene. Either the title needs a change or the content does.
      
      Some other things that might help:
      
      * Removing the advertisement for the company that sells the specific tomato variety. Hubs written to promote a product are unlikely to pass QAP.
      * Removing odd words. Berry-type and fruit-tomato aren't really great keywords for tomatoes high in lycopene and your readers will expect standard English. You could give readers an idea of what the hub is about and attract search engine traffic by sticking to the terms native English speakers would use to search for your high-lycopene tomato. It's OK to mention that tomatoes are a berry and a fruit later on, but giving your first subtitle that set of seldom-used hyphenated phrases instead of something more directly related to the topic confuses both readers and search engines.
      * Adding an on-topic introduction naming the tomato variety.
      * Relating the general information about tomatoes to the specific tomato variety.
      * Getting rid of off-topic information such as the nutrient differences between hothouse and field-grown tomatoes and replacing it with the nutritional information on the tomato variety compared to other, popular types of tomato.
      * Capitalizing the titles like titles.

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         Canita Proposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you.  I will work on what I understand or can correct. Thank you for your time.

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      erorantesposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      I see; your hub has a bad tomato on the picture. The old tomato takes point out of your pictures. You need to edit your hub and check for grammar errors. I like your hub. It is great. I love tomatoes. Good luck to you with your new hub.

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         Canita Proposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         The tomatoes were packaged together so I took the picture together.  I do not expect my tomato to be perfect just taste good.  Thank you so much for your advice and praise.  I will change out the picture.  Thanks for the good words some people can be really tough.  This was my first time of having my hub critiqued.  I need to get thicker skin.

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   firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

   So. Do you grow your own tomatoes? Have you tried to grow your own tomatoes? Do you know how to grow your own tomatoes? Did you know that a tomato needs a cold night and then a hot day to become red? Did you know that you can take green tomatoes and wrap them in newspaper and they will eventually turn red?

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      Canita Proposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for your help?  Yes, I have grown my own tomatoes for several years.  I'm not sure where the red part comes from, I love yellow tomatoes the best both pear and beef steak.  I love green tomatoes.  I know that the first frost will kill tomatoes still on the vine.  So I enjoy green tomatoes. I did know about the green tomato and newspaper.  I was not aware that the tomato needed a cold night for the tomato to turn red. I'll research that statement.

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   firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

   jeepers.... this fall, do I need to start shipping out tomatoes that are turning red?....

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