I'd like feedback on my article: How to Wake up Early - Everything You Need to..

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   Trihorusposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article How to Wake up Early - Everything You Need to Know (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   
   Also, I was asked to proofread my article.

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      It's a great article!
      
      Couple of things...
      
      Break the intro into two paragraphs. It's too blocky and uninviting at the moment. A little white space leads the reader's eye down the page.
      
      Be consistent with capitalising your subheadings - use proper title case. Also in your highlighted points - there are a couple of instances where you're not starting a sentence with a capital letter.
      
      Get rid of the live links to Pixabay and Pexels. You're only allowed to link out to the same domain twice and neither one requires attribution.
      
      Change your Amazon capsule for an in-text link, and refer to the specific brand of candle in the text and say why you use it.
      
      Change your -- to a proper em-dash. I have problems with this too because the HP text capsules don't 'translate' my emdashes correctly. Usually the editors fix it.
      
      Otherwise, it's really good.

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         Trihorusposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks a lot! I'll surely work on all of that! Do I replace those '--' with '-'? Or do I need to rephrase them without the '--'?

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            theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            It's a long dash—like that. Copy and paste it in. There are no spaces either side.
            
            This might help:
            
            http://www.thepunctuationguide.com/em-dash.html

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               Trihorusposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               Okay, I got it now. So, have I used the em-dashes properly, and I only need to replace them with the proper one? I'm a little confused.

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                  theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  Yes, they look okay to me, but I'm not going to check every one
                  
                  Go over the text and make sure you haven't over-used them.

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                     Trihorusposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                     And I also wanted to ask if I can resend the link for feedback before submitting the article again. I'm afraid that If I fail to make the required improvements as suggested by the moderator I might not be able to get it published again. I still have a lot to learn.

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                        theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                        No, just use this thread. No need to post another one.
                        
                        Also, I just noticed... you haven't put your article into a category. I'd suggest putting it under health or self-improvement, or whatever you think suits it best.

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                           Trihorusposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                           I have put it under health. I can't find the self-improvement one. Also, I would want you to thank you for taking so much time out for helping me with my article. You have really helped me a lot so far.

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                              Trihorusposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                              I just noticed that two of my articles (including the 'Wake up' one) don't display the topic. They just display 'HP', even though I have put them in some topics. Also, I noticed another article being put into a different category than the one I had put it in. I don't know how that happened. I thought HP did that and I didn't change it back wondering that HP might either change it back or it'd be un-featured if I attempted.

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                                 theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                                 Okay, don't worry about it then. Maybe the editors have a hand in it. Once it's featured, leave it alone as it will be assessed for a niche site.

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                                    Trihorusposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                                    Okay!

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                              theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                              

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