I'd like feedback on my Hub: Woman on the Road

  1. Joyce Fischer profile image74
    Joyce Fischerposted 17 months ago

    I'd like feedback on my Hub: Woman on the Road

    Did the content stand out from other articles on travel? Was it clear that there was something uniquely feminine about the experience? Anybody can break down on the road, but the way you are dealt with is different.
    Do you think this article is a good one to expand into a short story? ie. expand the dialogue and flesh out the characters?
    Feel free to add any other constructive comments. I'm here to develop my writing.

  2. fpherj48 profile image75
    fpherj48posted 17 months ago

    Hello Joyce and Welcome to HP..  Just read "Woman an the Road."  Quite well-written and enjoyable.  An entertaining story.
    You need to edit asap.....to completely delete the entire paragraph that is repeated, obviously in error...The paragraph about the mechanic assuring you.......See that?  You missed it so that makes me wonder how many times you went back over your work after you completed your story.  Please don't tell me you didn't read it over even once!
    That's the only advice I'll offer right now.  Once you have finished your hub, go over it...and over it....and over it again before hitting publish.
    Otherwise, like I said, you have talent and I wish you luck here!

    1. Joyce Fischer profile image74
      Joyce Fischerposted 17 months agoin reply to this

      Of course, I always proofread my work. However, when a mistake like that happens, it's usually an error that happens during the editing process. Thanks for pointing that out. I will attend to it immediately.

 
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