The Killer

Couldn’t recall how I got here

Darkness

Unfamiliar place

Dizziness

Blinded me more


Your voice echoing

Struggled to open my eyes

Blurred, just a pair of beautiful eyes

Voice echoing

Struggled to see thy lips talking

Blurred, just a beautiful smile


Couldn’t move

So weak

Hands and feet,

Both tied up


Your voice echoing

Heaven sent

Oh pretty eyes, pretty smile

Here to save me


Woke up, more likely

Still the room won’t change

Scary and cold space

Your arms wrapping me


Felt the urge to stand up

Still weak

Like a dove fallin’

Heaven sent catching me


Can’t recall how I got here

Still scared

Can’t find the answers

Your face leaning closer


Don’t kiss me,

I might die soon

Kill me now,

Don’t kill me soon


© 2010-Jan. b l a i s e


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Randy Behavior 6 years ago from Near the Ocean

Beautiful in a creepy way.


Lipstick 6 years ago

wow ..verrrry deeeep...i can feel the emotions...sad,loving,surender,hope and despair

nice one (^_^)


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blaise25 6 years ago from close to you... Author

@RB

glad to see you here :) it was actually a nightmare. creepy dream..thank you!

@Lipstick

now you read me.. :) thank you!


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I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s 6 years ago

This is a world of emotion... Nightmares are soo very scary... The one I wrote about was an awake one.. Though a couple months ago, I had one, while freaking out about my imigration status in my new country..Don't remember the dream.. yet, it was maybe a dream that I woke up, feeling a scary presence in my room.. my son was pleasantly sleeping next to me..My eyes were open, saw a shadow of a person float by, yet when I tried to follow.. I could not move my head only my eyes..then, I tried to move my body around... I felt paralysed..(picture, being hit by a stun gun,, that is all I could think of).. once I realized, I could not move more than my eyes.. all I could other than that was the pounding of my heart in my ears..

I have to say, if a loved one was next to me and noticed.. trying to soothe me, I would have probably been more afraid..

PS.. I think I was in shock thinking of the devastating effects it would have on us should my immigration not be successfull.. FEAR.. is deathening (my word)

Beautiful expressions.. :)


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carolina muscle 6 years ago from Charlotte, North Carolina

yow!!! I think this is a great piece of writing.. it ran a shiver down my spine!


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blaise25 6 years ago from close to you... Author

@Invictus

That was so freaking! I've experienced that, too, but without a shadow or whatever..if I'm not mistaken, they call it astral projection? Wherein your body is separated from your spirit..I was literally awake but seems dreaming becoz I couldn't move. Moving anything was so hard, felt like in a coma.I don't remember moving my eyes though..Nothing moved successfully except my tongue.LOL So the next time it happened, I knew what to do :)But man, it was freakishly suffocating! Becoz the hardest thing to do was to breathe.

Yep, FEAR is deathening ( :)your word ) but we have to fight back..

THANK YOU! it does mean something more..

@CM

oww, glad it had an effect on you :) Thanks!


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Micky Dee 6 years ago

Being a Vietnam Vet I occasionally had nightmares of being chased by dark figures until I forced myself "in my dreams" to turn and chase back. Sometimes I would wake myself struggling to do so. Thanks


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blaise25 6 years ago from close to you... Author

wow! you're really a tough man, Micky. thank you mighty Micky! :)


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Karen Russell 6 years ago

BROUGHT BACK A MEMORY OF A FRIEND WHO HAD BEEN KIDNAPPED YRS. AGO, SHE TOLD ME THE STORY, YOUR POEM REMINDED ME OF THE STORY SHE TOLD ME, SHE WAS RELEASED & IS DOING GOOD TODAY BUT, I KNOW SHE'LL NEVER FORGET THANKS, GREAT HUB....


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uliveulearn 6 years ago from Canada

I can feel the emotion in your writing. I think we can all relate to how fear can really paralyze us.


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blaise25 6 years ago from close to you... Author

@KR

Glad she's ok now. It was exactly a kidnap, but luckily, just a bad dream.. :) thank you!

@uliveulearn

brilliant username :) thank you


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Uriel 6 years ago from Lebanon

brilliant and creepily beautiful :D


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blaise25 6 years ago from close to you... Author

thank you Uriel :p


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Karen Russell 6 years ago

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blaise25 6 years ago from close to you... Author

cool, joined..it's flattering to have an invite :) THANK YOU!


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epigramman 6 years ago

I made the fatal mistake of reading this before bedtime on a stomach full of good white wine and sauteed chicken.

I FEEL QUEASY I CAN'T SLEEP but what you have just written is brave brave art!

I am so scared right now that I must leave on the lights - hold on - there's a knock at the door - strange because it's so late - what the fuc-------------------------------------i9hbrtreui4387477737379499@@@@@@@@@ettttttttttt!!!!!!


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blaise25 6 years ago from close to you... Author

hahahah sweetdreams Epigramman ;)


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AmyTaylor 6 years ago

FULL of emotion! Great writing...I like to feel and experience what Im reading


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The Demon Writer 6 years ago from The Real World.

I have a memory of feeling that kind of paralizing and overwhelming fear. I am still not sure if it was a dream or if it was real. It doesn't matter though. It felt real.


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Two Poles 5 years ago from Morgantown, West Virginia

Such is love. Nailed it!


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blaise25 5 years ago from close to you... Author

@AmyTaylor - Glad you liked it. Thanks. (so late to comment back..)

@The Demon Writer - it was a metaphor of love and pain and pain and love..

@Two Poles - Indeed. Wow, glad I did lol Thanks a lot!


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Nefarious_Misery 5 years ago from on the move

Beautifully dark.


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blaise25 5 years ago from close to you... Author

Thanks Nefarious Dark :)


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BeyondMax 4 years ago from Sydney, Australia

I know I'll sound totally creepy but I felt like in a maniac's shoes LOL It's a really cool poem, Fehl! So expressive, I lost myself in it. Noir at it's best!


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blaise25 4 years ago from close to you... Author

Oh wow! hehehe You are so amazing Max! Thanks for liking this piece. It was a mix of everything... :) Hope you have a sweet day!

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