Will you be kind enough to provide feedback regarding my latest hub?

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   wowtgpposted 10 years ago

   Hello fellow Hubbers,
   Firstly, I would like to know if it is okay to ask for some help regarding improvements in a Hub? I don't know if it is allowed to ask for feedback here, but then again, where else will I go for it other then the awesome HubPages community itself.
   
   
   So, I just published  2,000 word hub, and tried my best to keep all the grammatical errors and typos to the minimum, but since I am a non-native English speaker, I am sure that there are some mistakes that are yet to be weeded out. Is there anything I can do to improve the quality? I shall be thankful to you for your help.
   
   Here is the link to the hub -
   
   http://wowtgp.hubpages.com/hub/6-Gut-Fe … ver-Ignore

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      ameliam.michelle1posted 10 years agoin reply to this

      You are a non-native speaker of the language can be discerned the way you have framed sentences. Some of them have vague generalisations and others have misused words.
      
      Organisation could have been better, the hub is looking like unceasing series of typed prose paragraphs with asymmetrical breaking and some of the words misspelt. And, you should re-check your hub as there are plenty of words that are wrongly worded. For example, though instead of thought.
      
      However, the hub is well-written. The problem is with the the way you have dished out the hub onto the platter and the way it has been organised. Substance was quite good, just little brushing up and little scrutinizing from your part will do you a lot of good. God bless, and have an awesome day1

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         wowtgpposted 10 years agoin reply to this

         I am on to it.

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      jaydawg808posted 10 years agoin reply to this

      Nice way to get more views to your hub by asking.....

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      The Examiner-1posted 10 years agoin reply to this

      Hi, I see nothing wrong with asking for help. It shows that you want to learn.
      A short while ago I downloaded Microsoft Office Starter Edition 2010 (for Word) and it was for free. It shows where you have made mistakes in grammar and spelling (and other areas). I write my Hubs on there and correct them first then transfer them to HP. Then check them again before I publish them.

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      TIMETRAVELER2posted 10 years agoin reply to this

      This is the wrong place to ask this question.  There is another forum that you can access from the home page to ask for help improving your hub...can't think of its name off hand.  You are not permitted to link to a hub in this forum and can have problems doing so...so be careful.  If you are not a native speaker of English, it is very difficult to produce a grammatically correct and properly structured hub unless you are very, very good with English...in other words, fluent.  You might want to get a native speaker to proofread your work prior to submitting it until you get more comfortable writing here.  Good luck to you.

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   psycheskinnerposted 10 years ago

   You can't use just any old website as an image source.  They don't have the right to authorise picture use
   
   http://lori.ru/3967670

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      wowtgpposted 10 years agoin reply to this

      So, should I delete that pic? Where else can I look for some good  non-copyrighted pics?

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         psycheskinnerposted 10 years agoin reply to this

         morguefile, foter, wikimedia commons.

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            wowtgpposted 10 years agoin reply to this

            Thanks

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         ameliam.michelle1posted 10 years agoin reply to this

         Flickr is another good option, but do make sure you are filtering the search by clicking on 'advanced search' button and opting for creative commons images that are free to use and share. Do not forget to properly attribute the author of the photograph. It is considered a good practice. Have success in your endeavours here!

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   OMGirdleposted 10 years ago

   Your sentences are very long; more like run-on sentences. It may help to break them up a bit.
   
   Example, your first sentence could be broken up as follows: You hesitate a little to cross even when it’s red light and miss getting hit by a giant truck.  You decide to approach that girl you really like and wind up meeting someone who’d stay with you for the rest of your life.
   
   If you don't want to start both sentences with "You..." just reword them. This way, you have one concept per sentence. I use "Grammarly.com to help me with my writing. They have a free trial offer. After that, you have to pay for it.
   
   Hope this helps and keep writing!

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      wowtgpposted 10 years agoin reply to this

      Will do that. Thank you
      This is my first ever article out my comfort zone. I will get better with time

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   Aneegmaposted 10 years ago

   Good attempt but an article like this will not get noticed by any search engines due to lack of quality keywords. I suggest you hire an English Speaking Proofreader and learn how to display your hubs if you truly want to make money on here.

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      wowtgpposted 10 years agoin reply to this

      If only I had some money

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   blueheronposted 10 years ago

   Well.... I am not much into pop psychology, so I may be talking out of my ass here....
   
   This kind of thing is most interesting and entertaining when it includes detailed, well told, authentic "stories"--as in, dang, this really happened to me, or to my friend so-and-so. I know you have one authentic story in there, but each heading needs a "true story" to go with it. Then, on top of that, such stories have to be told so that they are suspenseful or amusing or both. This might make your article too long, but I can't see any way around it.
   
   Now, me, either I don't do sublimal "signs," or else I don't perceive them as "subliminal." The funny noise coming from the right front of the vehicle tips me off that I have a bad tire or a bad bearing--or both. I know my boyfriend is cheating because he is spending all his time drinking with a girl nicknamed "Double D." When my neighbor has used up three boxes of Kleenex while sitting in my living room weeping, I figure something is bothering her. But maybe I'm not very perceptive.

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      LongTimeMotherposted 10 years agoin reply to this

      lol. I'm laughing out loud at the image of the girlfriend and you consoling your neighbour ... but English is my first language. I'm wondering if wowtgp is going to need consoling after the frustration of trying to make the most from your advice.

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         blueheronposted 10 years agoin reply to this

         wowtgp just needs to be more specific and concrete. I can't remember his exact ethnicity, but my impression is that these folks tend to be reticent. This type of writing requires a gossipy, spicy flavor...I think.

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            wowtgpposted 10 years agoin reply to this

            I unpublished the hub for the time being.

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            ameliam.michelle1posted 10 years agoin reply to this

            blueheron has hit the nail right on its head. Make your hubs more informative without sacrificing on its readibility part. Let your hubs bring out your character and not a fictional persona.

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      wowtgpposted 10 years agoin reply to this

      I won't lie. The second half is so subtle that it's out of my comprehension.

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   LongTimeMotherposted 10 years ago

   Hi wowtgp. Keep writing. Keep reading. Don't stress too much right now. You can always come back to your early hubs and edit them again as you gain more confidence. I suggest you write more hubs, the best you can, and make changes once you've become more familiar with English grammar as you read other people's hubs and learned more through experience.
   
   I think you're doing fine.

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   akhildev143posted 10 years ago

   Does  Microsoft Office Starter Edition 2010 show grammatical errors??

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      Cardisaposted 10 years agoin reply to this

      Yes, Starter has a very good grammar checker but you still need to proof afterwards. I used it to edit some old stuff and was surprised at the number of errors it picked up. It's really good. You can also add Ginger grammar checker to your desktop to assist in finalizing your grammar check.

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         The Examiner-1posted 10 years agoin reply to this

         That is exactly what I do. I am simply pleased with the way that it catches errors as I go along. I always double-check again when I am finished. Then I triple-check and quadruple-check....
         By the way, what is Ginger grammar?

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            Cardisaposted 10 years agoin reply to this

            It's a free grammar checker which is only equivalent to Grammarly. Here is a link.
            http://www.gingersoftware.com/grammar-a … 7AodBzQAkQ

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               The Examiner-1posted 10 years agoin reply to this

               Thank you. I will check it out.

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      blueheronposted 10 years agoin reply to this

      I have always found both Grammar Check and Spell Check to be nearly worthless. Grammar Check in particular seems to be one of the most worthless applications in existence. If I remember my Chomsky (it's been awhile), there are only five basic sentence patterns in the English language. The other stuff is all modifiers. I can't figure out why Grammar Check can't seem to identify a subject, a verb, and an object. WTF?

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   LindaSmith1posted 10 years ago

   Dictionary, Thesaurus, AP style handbook
   
   I wrote a hub about this topic.

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