I'd like feedback on my Hub: For the Devotees of Krishna

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   darciefrenchposted 9 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub For the Devotees of Krishna. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      Jason Marovichposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      I'd move the photo captioned "The answer to our prayers are ever present" to the top with the caption intact.  Beneath it you could have the opening text headlined "Only Krishna satisfies His devotees".
      
      The opening two statements both start with Devotees of Krishna.  Couldn't the second sentence replace that phrase with "Believers" or something else?
      
      The paragraphs are too large for an article.  Second sentence in opening text runs on.  Start a new paragraph at "Everything material..."  It's easier on the eyes.  Start a new paragraph at "The covering of maya..."
      
      Perhaps add a historical picture (wikimedia commons perhaps?) of this culture somewhere to beef up images as you break up your paragraph length.  Or, you could play around with the material prose and quotation, move it up in the article maybe and add text after it, followed by your vid.
      
      You've got good content, it just needs organization so that the reader isn't reading long passages instead of reading some content and then getting treated to the images, prose, and quotes that enhance the article.
      
      Cheers.

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         darciefrenchposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks Jason! I will do some more playing around with it as you suggested It is currently not featured for quality .. I can't figure out the problem there.

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            Kylyssaposted 9 years agoin reply to this

            I'd suggest you use more varied and diverse wording because I could see how some might interpret the style as keyword stuffing even though it's just the way you are writing naturally. I can tell you are going for simplicity but I think you've gone a bit too far and need to get more concrete imagery in your text. I've found that the more abstract the material I'm covering, the lower my initial rating in QAP is on a hub.
            
            I felt the meaning of your hub was clear but I also wonder if the people doing the QAP did?
            
            Reading through it, I can see how it might be very difficult to understand for someone without strong English reading comprehension skills. Keep in mind that HP uses Amazon Turk to rate our hubs and that a fair percentage of Turkers are not native English speakers.
            
            I'd also strongly suggest a change of images to pictures that clearly have something to do with Krishna, even without text on them, at least temporarily. Unless someone understands the intent and meaning of your hub text fairly well, they aren't going to understand how the text on the images relates to the hub and may wonder what ducks have to do with Krishna.

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               darciefrenchposted 9 years agoin reply to this

               Many thanks Kylyssa - all very good points!!

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                  Kylyssaposted 9 years agoin reply to this

                  It looks a lot more organized now and I found it clearer to read. I'm sure the nice Krishna image showing up in the thumbnail with the hub blurb will help encourage people to click.

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   darciefrenchposted 9 years ago

   Many thanks Kylyssa - I added the portrait of Krishna and changed the word devotee in a few places, so as not to appear to be keyword stuffing. It is still not featured, but those who have read it appear to be enjoying it. It's my top ranking Hub currently. I am still not exactly clear on why it is not featured, would be nice to have greater clarity on that, but oh well. I'm happy with it; it gave me joy to write it.
   Thanks again, I really appreciate your participation!

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   Millionaire Tipsposted 9 years ago

   I would recommend breaking up your paragraphs to be shorter to make it more readable and adding a more Indian flavor to the hub.  I found many images you could use at:
   
   https://www.flickr.com/search/?l=commde … ;q=krishna

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