It's my first hub and need your feedback

  1. NuIfEm profile image61
    NuIfEmposted 16 months ago

    Hello, everybody! I just published my first hub.
    Please give your feedback. =]

    Adult hobbies at home 

    Also, I'm quite new here. Its only been a week.So, I would appreciate it if the critique isnt too 'harsh' :p

  2. Rupert Taylor profile image97
    Rupert Taylorposted 16 months ago

    Your article is thin on helpful information; it's more just a list of hobbies and pastimes.

    But, the bigger issue is English grammar. Here's just one example:
    "Its meaningless, if people recognise alphabets and understand the words, but doesn't bother to read.At first, reading can be boring. However, once in a while you might enjoy it."

    The first sentence is contorted and doesn't really contain any information. "Its" is wrong, should be it is or it's. "Doesn't" is wrong, should be don't. There needs to be a space after the end of one sentence and the start of another. The last two sentences are hardly likely to encourage someone to take up reading - "reading can be boring" and "once in a while you might enjoy it."

    1. NuIfEm profile image61
      NuIfEmposted 16 months ago in reply to this

      Oh, that is why it's unpublished. I'll try to improve grammar and add more informations in the article. Thanks for your feedback, Rupert Taylor. (:

 
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