I'd like feedback on my Hub: I Can't Drink

Jump to Last Post 1-2 of 2 discussions (5 posts)
  1. Cherie Kurland profile image78
    Cherie Kurlandposted 21 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub I Can't Drink (must be signed in to view).

    What can I do to improve? I've edited out all brand references and the only references left are either government related or a 501(c)(3) charity.  Truly not sure what more to do. Thanks!


    1. theraggededge profile image98
      theraggededgeposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      Hi Cherie,

      It's a bit muddled and lacking focus. Have a think about who would be likely to need this information and then write it for them. To be honest, I didn't learn anything from it. Perhaps you should take one aspect of not being able to drink and write about it - it's all a bit of a mish-mash as it stands.

      The links aren't necessary, so take them out. If you were writing an in-depth article about the reasons why medication and alcohol don't mix, then yes, links to studies would help.

      The image of dollars isn't really relevant.

      Can't think of anything else, but hope that helps.

    2. Jason mackenzie profile image68
      Jason mackenzieposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      Hi, a few points that I feel you can improve on -

      1 - bridging the huge gap between paragraphs in the intro

      2 - in this sentence - 'Instead, I’m one of many who must take prescription medications know to be toxic to the liver.' - you should replace 'know' with 'known'

      3 - 'I can’t justify actions that challenge that research.' - Using 'that' twice is sounding a little awkward. How about re-framing the sentence?

      Hope I have been helpful, thanks, regards...

      1. Cherie Kurland profile image78
        Cherie Kurlandposted 21 months agoin reply to this

        Thank you! I didn't run this piece through Grammarly and I need to do that henceforth. The gaps might be from copy-paste from Pages software to HubPages; I'll see what I can do about that, too.

  2. Cherie Kurland profile image78
    Cherie Kurlandposted 21 months ago

    thanks - let me work on the specifics of what you say and ponder a full rewrite - job 1 is to define the audience.


This website uses cookies

As a user in the EEA, your approval is needed on a few things. To provide a better website experience, hubpages.com uses cookies (and other similar technologies) and may collect, process, and share personal data. Please choose which areas of our service you consent to our doing so.

For more information on managing or withdrawing consents and how we handle data, visit our Privacy Policy at: https://hubpages.com/privacy-policy#gdpr

Show Details
HubPages Device IDThis is used to identify particular browsers or devices when the access the service, and is used for security reasons.
LoginThis is necessary to sign in to the HubPages Service.
Google RecaptchaThis is used to prevent bots and spam. (Privacy Policy)
AkismetThis is used to detect comment spam. (Privacy Policy)
HubPages Google AnalyticsThis is used to provide data on traffic to our website, all personally identifyable data is anonymized. (Privacy Policy)
HubPages Traffic PixelThis is used to collect data on traffic to articles and other pages on our site. Unless you are signed in to a HubPages account, all personally identifiable information is anonymized.
Amazon Web ServicesThis is a cloud services platform that we used to host our service. (Privacy Policy)
CloudflareThis is a cloud CDN service that we use to efficiently deliver files required for our service to operate such as javascript, cascading style sheets, images, and videos. (Privacy Policy)
Google Hosted LibrariesJavascript software libraries such as jQuery are loaded at endpoints on the googleapis.com or gstatic.com domains, for performance and efficiency reasons. (Privacy Policy)
Google Custom SearchThis is feature allows you to search the site. (Privacy Policy)
Google MapsSome articles have Google Maps embedded in them. (Privacy Policy)
Google ChartsThis is used to display charts and graphs on articles and the author center. (Privacy Policy)
Google AdSense Host APIThis service allows you to sign up for or associate a Google AdSense account with HubPages, so that you can earn money from ads on your articles. No data is shared unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy)
Google YouTubeSome articles have YouTube videos embedded in them. (Privacy Policy)
VimeoSome articles have Vimeo videos embedded in them. (Privacy Policy)
PaypalThis is used for a registered author who enrolls in the HubPages Earnings program and requests to be paid via PayPal. No data is shared with Paypal unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy)
Facebook LoginYou can use this to streamline signing up for, or signing in to your Hubpages account. No data is shared with Facebook unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy)
MavenThis supports the Maven widget and search functionality. (Privacy Policy)
Google AdSenseThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Google DoubleClickGoogle provides ad serving technology and runs an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Index ExchangeThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
SovrnThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Facebook AdsThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Amazon Unified Ad MarketplaceThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
AppNexusThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
OpenxThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Rubicon ProjectThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
TripleLiftThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Say MediaWe partner with Say Media to deliver ad campaigns on our sites. (Privacy Policy)
Remarketing PixelsWe may use remarketing pixels from advertising networks such as Google AdWords, Bing Ads, and Facebook in order to advertise the HubPages Service to people that have visited our sites.
Conversion Tracking PixelsWe may use conversion tracking pixels from advertising networks such as Google AdWords, Bing Ads, and Facebook in order to identify when an advertisement has successfully resulted in the desired action, such as signing up for the HubPages Service or publishing an article on the HubPages Service.
Author Google AnalyticsThis is used to provide traffic data and reports to the authors of articles on the HubPages Service. (Privacy Policy)
ComscoreComScore is a media measurement and analytics company providing marketing data and analytics to enterprises, media and advertising agencies, and publishers. Non-consent will result in ComScore only processing obfuscated personal data. (Privacy Policy)
Amazon Tracking PixelSome articles display amazon products as part of the Amazon Affiliate program, this pixel provides traffic statistics for those products (Privacy Policy)