I'd like feedback on my Hub: Single, twin, quattro, quad, unicable and monoblack

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   Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Single, twin, quattro, quad, unicable and monoblack LNB ...... what's the difference? (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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   Rupert Taylorposted 7 years ago

   I am totally unqualified to comment on the technical aspects of your article, but I am able to offer advice on English usage. There are numerous grammar and punctuation problems that might be identified by running your copy through a free program such as Grammarly or Hemingway.
   
   Your headline is much too long. Think about what someone would type into a search field if they are looking for the information you are offering. It's extremely unlikely to be "Single, twin, quattro, quad, unicable and monoblack LNB ...... what's the difference?" Short headlines work best.
   
   Also, do you have permission to use the images? This link will help https://hubpageshelp.com/media/Learning … -image-use

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   Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years ago

   Yes the images are from  Creative Commons Attribution wikimedia and they wrote 
   
       You are free:
   
           to share – to copy, distribute and transmit the work
           to remix – to adapt the work
   
       Under the following conditions:
   
           attribution – You must attribute the work in the manner specified by the author or licensor (but not in any way that suggests that they endorse you or your use of the work).
           share alike – If you alter, transform, or build upon this work, you may distribute the resulting work only under the same or similar license to this one.

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      Sherry Hewinsposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Yes, but you did not attribute them in any manner at all. You need to follow the instructions on the site where you got the photos on how to attribute them.

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         Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         ok i will do that
         do u think there ate another errors?

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            theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            Have you changed the title and fixed the errors we already told you about? Do those first and then we'll take another look.

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               Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

               i will do that today and when its done i will tell u

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   theraggededgeposted 7 years ago

   I was completely lost right at the beginning. The introduction needs working on. Your readers need to know what the hub is about right from the start, i.e. satellite systems and how they work. Don't use acronyms right off the bat. Write it out in full in the first instance, then use abbreviations.
   
   I agree with Rupert, the title doesn't work. Try this: https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … ndly-Title
   
   Hope that helps.

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   Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years ago

   ok i will do that .
   What about the grammer? any errors?

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      theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Yes, lots. Rupert already mentioned it so I didn't bother. I'm afraid we are not able to correct your grammar, error-by-error. You can try reading the text out loud, getting someone to proofread it for you (often we can't see our own mistakes), or run it through Grammarly - although that won't correct everything.

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   Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years ago

   oh ,  i feel down i made alot of effort to make this hub these programs are useless. ihope u can mention some of these errors so i can try to fix it.

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      firstcookbookladyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      oh, we feel down too we made a lot of effort to help you your writing is useless too hope you can make some changes and fix the errors or just delete the whole mess and start over good luck to u in

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         theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Did you, firstcookbooklady? I didn't see a helpful contribution from you. Do you think your comment adds anything useful to the discussion?
         
         Maybe you could actually take a look at the hub and make a suggestion?

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            firstcookbookladyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            I was merely imitating the way he/she was talking to us. I still think there are far too many grammatical errors and spelling errors and words out of context to make the entire article fly. I think that, since he/she copied someone else's work, even if it claimed that it was okay to copy, I think that original work is much better than patchwork quilt pages.

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               theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

               When did he copy someone's work?
               
               Is it okay to mock someone whose first language isn't English by 'merely imitating' them?
               
               This isn't the first time I've seen a snarky comment by you to a newbie. He's trying his best and you shoot him down? I agree that some of them (copy & pasters/self promoters) deserve a good snark, but Mostafa doesn't. Otherwise we wouldn't be trying to help him.
               
               So, instead of being so mean, why don't you try to help instead? Otherwise, if you can't say anything nice... maybe you should avoid the feedback threads.

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                  firstcookbookladyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

                  well, if you copy and paste his first few paraagraphs into Google, the following page, from Afrisat Technologies comes up.

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                     Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

                     i know all these information , its my job
                     i just take some paragraphs to avoid grammar mistakes but i deleted them and made the article simpler

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                        theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

                        Never, ever take someone else's text, Mostafa. It's plagiarism, which is a polite term for theft. That alone will prevent your hub being approved and could mean a ban from HubPages. It is completely unacceptable.
                        
                        If you do it again, none of us will help you. It must be in your own words, not a rewriting of someone else's hard work.
                        
                        Do you understand?

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                           Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

                           done
                           i will delete it even all the article is my idea and i wrote like 95% of it but its ok  i have many skills and ideas but the problem is how to descripe it in a good way but i wont get down i will do my best to be a good writer in hubpages

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   Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years ago

   ok done

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      theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Took another look.
      
      Title is better, but you need to use title case, like this: The LNB : How Does It Work?
      
      Remove all instances of text-speak 'u' is not an acceptable substitution for 'you'.
      
      Still many grammatical errors, "Its function is to pick up the weak signals coming from the satellite and amplifies it to finally become a watching channel."
      
      "Its function is to amplify the signals received from the satellite so we can watch and hear the broadcast channel." or something like that.
      
      "And the question is where the LNB gets power?"
      
      "Where does the LNB get its power?"
      
      The problem is that there is an error in almost every sentence.
      
      Delete Firstly, Secondly, Thirdly, etc. Instead use 1. 2. 3.
      
      Make sure subtitles are in title case, as shown above.
      
      This is horrible:
      
      "It has four outputs. Hey, did you say that there are four outputs?
      
      Yes, four outputs . So what's the difference between it and the quad LNB? OK"
      
      "It has four outputs. However, the difference between the Quattro and the Quad LNB is this:"
      
      Also be consistent with using numbers. The correct way is to write all numbers nine and under in full. Numbers 10 and over are written as numerals. As I just did.
      
      Make sure you put a full stop/period at the end of every sentence.
      
      That's me done. Don't forget to use Grammarly and Hemingway apps. Just paste your text in to get suggestions.
      
      Let us know if you get it approved

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         Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         ok done.
         can u have another look  now?

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            theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            No. No more now   As I said, there are grammatical errors in almost every sentence. You have to get them fixed.

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               Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

               ok i am working on it thx so much for ur help

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   Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years ago

   they tell me that it need revision
   whats wrong with it now
   i think i did all the advices

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      Sherry Hewinsposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      I see that you did attribute your photos, that's good. You didn't change Firstly, Secondly, etc. like theraggededge recommended.
      
      I assume that English is not your first language. That must make it very hard for you.
      
      This is your answer to the question : "what is the LNB?"
      
      "The LNB is important component of a satellite television system.
      
      LNB is an abbreviation for Low Noise Block,it sits on the end of an arm face the parabolic reflector (dish).
      
      The LNB is a combination of low-noise amplifier,frequency mixer,local oscillator and Intermediate Frequency IF."
      
      This is gobbledygook to me. I have no clue what you are trying to say. If I don't know what an LBN is, this is not going to tell me.
      
      I'm sorry, I know you are trying hard, but most people just won't read past that. Maybe you have been too ambitious with your first article. Perhaps you should tackle a simpler subject.

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         Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Thx so much for ur openions
         i have many skills but i will try to make it simple as much as i can

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            theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            Mostafa, are you trying to edit the hub on your phone?

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               Mostafa Elkadyposted 7 years agoin reply to this

               no
               i edited it from computer

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