I'd like feedback on my Hub: Salute to these Guys

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   CHIRAG singhalposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Salute to these Guys. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      galleryofgraceposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Your hub title should indicate what the hub is about.
      No one is going to search for."salute to these guys"

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         CHIRAG singhalposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         So what should be the name of the article , give your opinion.

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      theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there, welcome.
      
      Your bio: there's no such word as 'professionalist'. It's professional.
      
      Your hub: Remove all the unnecessary italics and bold text. All of it.
      
      Remove all the ampersands (&) and replace with 'and'.
      
      Delete all those exclamation marks. Multi-instances of exclamation marks is really unprofessional - in any language.
      
      Proofread for grammatical errors. There are too many for me to list. If you can get someone fluent in English to go over it for you, all the better.
      
      Example:
      
      "As his age increases dynamically on the other side his body due to dwarfism remain small & gained Upton 27 inches height."
      
      I don't know what you are trying to say because of the poor grammar. Almost every sentence contains a grammatical error. Some of it is impossible to understand. HubPages is primarily for an English-speaking readership, so articles published here have to be of good quality.
      
      You have used some clearly watermarked marked stock images. That's illegal and is against HubPages rules. Images must be legal to use - either your own photos or Creative Commons licensed or in the Public Domain. Every image must be checked to make sure you are allowed to use it. Sources should be cited in the image capsule. That's what those boxes in the capsule are for.
      https://hubpageshelp.com/media/Learning … -image-use
      
      You've linked to the Daily Mail. Delete it. It is not a reputable source of factual information
      
      Remove the star ratings capsule. As it says, it's only for recipes.
      
      I can't see this article getting approved without a substantial amount of work. Until you can improve your English, I can't recommend that you waste any more time creating hubs. Sorry.

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         CHIRAG singhalposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Mam , first of all thank you for finding mistake.
         Should I write more article or I leave this as I have to do this as it is very important for me.

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   CHIRAG singhalposted 7 years ago

   Any other error you find please tell.

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   AshutoshJoshi06posted 7 years ago

   Buddy the articles is full of grammatical errors. There is problem with tenses, sentence construction and even some spellings are incorrect. I suggest you first proofread the entire hub.

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   CHIRAG singhalposted 7 years ago

   Hay I have done a lot of changes now please cross check it and suggest me something more which I should edit.

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      theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      There are still a lot of errors.
      
      Change all instances of & to 'and'.
      Remove all the exclamation points!!!
      Make sure all images are sourced.
      Remove the Daily Mail link.
      Correct grammar. That means a total rewrite.
      
      As I said, to write (and earn money) on HubPages, you must have excellent English writing skills.

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