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I'd like feedback on my article: Anemia in Pregnancy and Complications

  1. docashp profile image69
    docashpposted 5 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Anemia in Pregnancy and Complications. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. Jeremy Gill profile image89
    Jeremy Gillposted 5 weeks ago

    This is a very, very specific topic that I'm not sure will garner the interest of people unfamiliar with it. But you never know, and here are my suggestions:

    1) Remove extra white space in-between capsules.
    2) Capitalize key words in headings.
    3) Think of a catchy, interest-grabbing title.
    4) Proofread. Several sentences need commas, and here's an instance with no space after the period: "...neonate.Although..."
    5) I'd change "learnt" to "learned," as it's a term familiar to both American English and British English speakers.


    Seems you have the information; try your best to present it in an entertaining and memorable way.

  3. pen promulgates profile image80
    pen promulgatesposted 5 weeks ago

    True. It needs to be more engaging and easy to decipher.
    Are you a technical writer or something?
    Your writing is too scientific to fathom.
    Not that I am dumb, but could not understand it all too well and clearly.

  4. psycheskinner profile image80
    psycheskinnerposted 5 weeks ago

    You are using a lot of charts and images that are probably covered by copyright.

 
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