I'd like feedback on my article: Heat Stroke: A Scientific Update

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   docashpposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Heat Stroke: A Scientific Update. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      I'd suggest two improvements.
      
      "Hyperthermia is the elevation of core body temperature due to the failure of thermoregulation"
      
      You should insert the word "the" between the words "of" and "core" in the sentence mentioned above.
      
      Also, it is unnecessary to add the degree sign at the same space as 40 and degrees. I think you should get rid of the degree sign.
      
      Sorry, I just skimmed your article. Hopefully, the experts can help you make your article better.

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   psycheskinnerposted 6 years ago

   You are still using copyrighted material, including stock photography.  Did you pay for a license to use it?

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      you know what? Youre right. He should provide source links and sources to his images. this goes against what hubpages is all about:posting ORIGINAL and HIGH-QUALITY content.

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         docashpposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Hey I provided the links but I think there is still some problem.

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            theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            Okay, I'm going to say the opposite. Remove the live links to Pixabay because they are breaking the two links to any domain limit. Pixabay doesn't require live links or even attribution. Leave the wiki one in place.
            
            I think you are using way too many call-out capsules. They should be used for impact only. Put text into text capsules, where the subheadings will help your search engine ranking.
            
            I know nothing about the topic so can't comment on it. It looks like a comprehensive resource to me.

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               psycheskinnerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               The problem was not the absence of links to Pixabay, but that the pictures did not come from Pixabay.  Several of them were definitely stock photos not available for free with or without attribution.

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                  theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  Oh, okay, right, I just saw the pixabay links. It's been unpublished now in any case.
                  
                  I just checked a couple of other images the OP is using on other hubs and I can't find them on Pixabay, even though he is linking to the site.
                  
                  Docashp, you must make sure ALL your images are legal-to-use.

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                     docashpposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                     I checked the images and also reduced the call outs. I think there are still some unresolved issues. Is there any objective way to find out. Will try to proofread again.

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