I's like to get feedback on my Article

  1. tinahanna7 profile image76
    tinahanna7posted 5 months ago

    Hi everyone, I am just getting back into writing on hubpages and would like to get some feedback on my newest article. https://hubpages.com/family/Busting-Out … -Fit-Them. Thank you for taking the time to read it and letting me know what you think.

  2. Jeremy Gill profile image96
    Jeremy Gillposted 5 months ago

    Welcome back to HubPages. Here are my suggestions:

    1) HubPages doesn't like using Amazon capsules unless we both specifically discuss them and convey personal experience with the product.; either remove the capsule or provide these insights.
    2) Nitpicky, but I'd use other forms of emphasis than all-caps (which imitates yelling). Bolding, italics, or the em dash work well.
    3) Alter or remove the poll question; the current one conveys hints of uncertainty.

    You have much better grammar than most articles I review, which is a nice break. As long as you fix point one, HP should savor your writing.