I'd like feedback on my article: Top Five Popular Orthodox Traditions from India

  1. Deepika ojha profile image46
    Deepika ojhaposted 2 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Top Five Popular Orthodox Traditions from India (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. Rupert Taylor profile image99
    Rupert Taylorposted 2 weeks ago

    There are many grammar problems with this article.

    Definite (the) and indefinite (a) articles are missing throughout.

    Random capital letters appear where they shouldn't.

    Some sentences are rambling run-ons.

    Here are a couple of specific problems:

    "This sometimes also reminds you Spanish bull-Fighting game." Would be better as "This is reminiscent of Spanish bullfighting."

    "Jallikattu is celebrated on Mattu Pongal Day as a part of (the) Pongal celebration. It is also called as (remove as) "eruthazhuvuthal", a popular traditional sport in which a raged (an enraged) bull is released in (into) the crowd and multiple participants try to control the bull by grabbing the large hump of the bulls (bull's) back with their both (remove both) arms.

 
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