Should I Remove This Link

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   Anita Haschposted 7 years ago

   Hi, I hope somebody can help. I have 2 hubs that is in fact one long article that I split in two.
   The Chowchilla School Bus gets Hijacked Part ,1 and Part 2.
   Part 2 was published, but part one needs attention. Problem is I can't see anything wrong with it?
   I placed a link from part 1 to part 2. Surely this is allowed? Or should I remove it?
   http://hubpages.com/politics/The-Chowch … ked-Part-1

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   Jeremy Gillposted 7 years ago

   If you're going to keep the Hubs separated, I would definitely include the link, although some Hubbers may advise you to turn it into one long Hub.
   
   With a quick skim, here are my suggestions: remove extra white space between paragraphs and use pictures or other breaks from the text-heavy chunks. Also, the Hub is already long enough, but some sort of overview at the start may help. Several sentences need work, like "Each child’s name and age, and an article of clothing was taken from most of them."
   
   Best of luck.

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   Marisa Wrightposted 7 years ago

   I'm not sure why they would object to that link, but I have to point out several problems with this Hub which will prevent it being a success.
   
   The very first thing I'd say is, it's never a good idea to write a long Hub and just split it down the middle. If you've got too much material to put in one Hub, then sit down and look for a logical place to split it up.    In this case, with a little tidying up, you could make your first Hub the story of how the kidnapping unfolded.  The second Hub could be about the subsequent investigation.
   
   That will give you the opportunity to create two Hub titles that clearly describe what each Hub is about. And you need to check on Google to find the best titles, otherwise no readers will find it.
   
   I tried typing "The Chowchilla School" into Google and the auto-complete came up with nothing related to the kidnapping. That means it's a dreadful choice for a title, because it means NO ONE is typing in "The Chowchilla School" when they're searching for information about the kidnap.  What did auto-complete was, "The Chowchilla Kidnapping Story", so that could be a title idea for the first Hub.  Maybe the second one could be "The Chowchilla Kidnapping Investigation".  But try playing around with Google and see what autocompletes for you.
   
   I feel like your headings need work - and by the way, never put a heading on a photo. Use a caption instead.
   
   I wonder, do you find these crime stories get traffic?

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      Anita Haschposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the advice on the Titles.  I must admit I have read up on auto suggest but have not tried it for my titles. Will do so with my new hubs.
      I actually divided the article by part 1, 'The Kidnapping,' and  part 2, 'The Escape and Rescue.
      My crime stories do not all get much traffic. Although  'Baby Kidnapped' and the one about the serial killer's traffic is reasonable.
      I published a eBook on crime stories, named 'Baby Kidnapped And Other Stories.' This was my first one besides the alternative health ones and I must admit I rushed it. I am revising it and will replace it with the improved version. I need to add the chapters in front with links to each chapter. However, I was pleasantly surprised that this eBook as well as my eBook on Aloe Vera gets sales every month as well as 'reads.'
      Considering that I have done no marketing besides a PowerPoint video.

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         Marisa Wrightposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         I could see that your article was more or less divided like that - but it needs an introduction for the first one, and I felt that the escape was covered in part 1. You just mentioned them arriving at their destination at the start of part 2.  Anyway the main point is, your titles need to say what the Hub is about.

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            Anita Haschposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            Yes I just read it again and changed the title to
            'The Chowchilla Kidnapping,'. Part 1 and
            'The Chowchilla Investigation.'
            I don't think I need to add part 2, in the title of the other hub.  Thank you.

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   Anita Haschposted 7 years ago

   Thank you for your assistance Jeremy. Will read through it again.

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