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This is how we get started

  1. srogers profile image50
    srogersposted 8 years ago

    I'd love to get some feedback on my writing, here is my hub: http://hubpages.com/hub/How-to-Find-You … r-Nonsense if anyone is interested, thank you!

  2. Maddie Ruud profile image79
    Maddie Ruudposted 8 years ago

    Just an admin note: I moved this thread to the Extreme Hub Makeover forum, which is the only place you are permitted to post links to your own hubs.

  3. EYEAM4ANARCHY profile image81
    EYEAM4ANARCHYposted 8 years ago

    Your Hub doesn't seem to have any purpose. I don't understand who "we" represents, who Tommy is, or why I'm reading about either one of them.

  4. Marisa Wright profile image99
    Marisa Wrightposted 8 years ago

    I have to admit, I didn't get it either.

    You give us a lot of information about Tommy, but you don't give us anything to make us care.

    If this is a fiction Hub - a short story or character study - then you need to "hook" your reader at the start. Make us curious about this guy Tommy, so we want to read the rest of the story. Otherwise we will just flick on to the next Hub.

  5. karmen88 profile image53
    karmen88posted 8 years ago

    Okay I guess I'm not the only one that didn't understand it. Who is Tommy?