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I'd like feedback on my article: Systems Approach to Getting Out The Door

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    Dale Vaillancourtposted 6 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Systems Approach to Getting Out The Door (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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    VVanNessposted 6 weeks ago

    So I'd love to offer my advice if it helps you out.

    First of all, I was really enjoying reading your article and then it abruptly ended. You were explaining, I think, why we should use a systems approach, but I didn't get that. I was waiting for the explanation of what that kind of approach even was and how it applied to your skiing and never got it. But I did enjoy reading about you getting ready to go skiing. That was a fantastic introduction, I wish you had written a lot more.

    Second, your title doesn't allow for Google to categorize it correctly. Make sure to use keywords, and the right ones, to to create SEO for your article.

    Finally, I would include an author biography at the top. It can't hurt.

    I can't wait to read the rest of your article! You should make the middle of your article the skiing part of your trip and the end of it the end of your skiing trip putting everything away. Just a thought.

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      Dale Vaillancourtposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

      I made some of the changes you suggested - please check it out.Thanks!

      Dale

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    Dale Vaillancourtposted 6 weeks ago

    Excellent advice. Thanks!  I will work on it.

  4. Zola Mars profile image90
    Zola Marsposted 6 weeks ago

    I think you could also add some photographs.

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      Dale Vaillancourtposted 6 weeks agoin reply to this

      I added pics and some other edits-please check it out-thanks!

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    Dale Vaillancourtposted 6 weeks ago

    Will do. Thanks!

 
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