I'd like feedback on my article: Keep Fit Enthusiasts Eat These Foodstuffs

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   Miebakagh57posted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Keep Fit Enthusiasts Eat These Foodstuffs. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I would guess that it's because some of the images are fuzzy. Try to find some good ones on Pixabay.
      
      Look at this lovely yam photo: https://pixabay.com/en/yams-purple-root … h-1557440/
      
      You do put a lot of work into your hubs, Miebakagh. I hope it gets featured soon.

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   Miebakagh57posted 5 years ago

   Hi theraggededge, thanks for the feedback and suggestions. Will visit pix, download and upload soon. Have a nice time.

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   Bede le Venerableposted 5 years ago

   Miebakagh,
   You demonstrate good expertise in this article. However, it’s the same old issues holding you back.
   
   First, watch your capitalization in subtitles- they also must follow APA regulations.
   
   As theraggededge says, your images need improving. Remember, it’s not professional to have date signatures on your images.
   
   Here is an image of limewater that would look beautiful in your article:
   https://pixabay.com/en/mineral-water-li … s-1532300/
   
   Here are some tricky sentences:
   
   “And so, it is necessary every stretching idiot eats the right kind of foodstuff.” Are you sure you want to use “stretching idiot”? Anyhow, the verb should be “eat.”
   
   “You can live with proteins, fruits, vegetables, fats and or oils, and carbs. But you cannot live without water.” I think you meant, “You can live without protein, etc.”
   
   “Keep fit ruts should take more in the forms as in fruits and vegetables.” What do you mean by “keep fit ruts”?
   
   This subtitle needs fixing, “Eating fresh oranges and or drinking its juicy.” Perhaps this sounds better, “The Benefits of Fresh Oranges”
   
   There are some spelling mistakes, “Hollistic,” etc,
   
   The title may sound better by exchanging “With” for “eat.” If you want to keep it, I recommend using a comma after “Enthusiasts.”
   
   There are a couple quotes, but you don’t cite the author.

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      Miebakagh57posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Bede, after editing, I note your points.
      I was so surprised there are too many errors in this hub. And, I wonder how I got it published. The title not being in APA  shocked me much. However, I have re-do the tile into APA format.
      I will later re-read and re-check grammatical errors again. I will take your suggestions into account.

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         Bede le Venerableposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Your main title accords with APA- the subtitles (blue titles) need fixing. Don’t be discouraged, Miebakagh, your article is enjoyable. It will be more enjoyable if you work on it a bit more. Can I offer a suggestion about your main title? The word “foodstuff” is rather uncommon. You will more likely receive visitors from Google if you change the keywords. For example, “Sports Diet Essentials,” or “Diet for Exercise Enthusiasts,” may have more appeal.

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            Miebakagh57posted 5 years agoin reply to this

            Hello Bede, I welcomed the suggestion. I like the lime/lemon drink picture, and I have to load it on my hub. I will always look out for such stellar pictures. I had yesterday night make a little adjustment with my kodak 522 camera. I am testing the pictures.
            Many thanks, Bede.

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   Kenna McHughposted 5 years ago

   I like your article, but you need to look over your writing. There are some typos.

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      Miebakagh57posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Kenna, thanks for stopping by..I was very surprised by such many mistakes. I wonder if I had is not read it before publishing or what.
      However, I am correcting them.
      Thanks again.

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   Kenna McHughposted 5 years ago

   Anytime. I love to help. Sometimes, I fail to see typos, too. I am surprised as well. Even when I have gone over the article several times, later I will find a typo. We try hard, my friend.

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      Miebakagh57posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks, Kenna. I am still re-editing the hub. It is now unpublished. I will publish it 24 hours later.

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   DrMark1961posted 5 years ago

   Did you unpublish this in order to edit? When I went to check on your edits, I get a 404 page not found message.
   If you did unpublish to edit, you do not need to do so.

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      Miebakagh57posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hello Dr.Mark, I was very much surprised that the hub contained too much error. Content in context was not enough and earn me lack of quality. It was being read for over a week. So I unpublished it to re-edit. I will later publish the hub within 24 hours time. You will then have a chance to access my story.
      I am very sorry. Thanks for the understanding.

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   Miebakagh57posted 5 years ago

   Hi Dr.Mark, I had finished editing the hub. Please take a look. Thanks.

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   DrMark1961posted 5 years ago

   You still make a lot of claims on here that need to be backed up by references. For example, you wrote "Alternately, a deep breathing exercise before you eat for just 5 minutes will solve the allergic reaction." If you have an article from a NIH journal that discussses that, great. If not, it needs to be modified. (Alternately, some people believe that...)
   Also "Aside from bone and muscle health, sugarcane fights breast and prostate cancer. So, it is good for joggers."
   In my language we also say suck oranges, but in English I do not think that useage is proper. It is "eat oranges".
   This is much improved over the first time I read it. It could still do with a little editing, but much less so than last week.

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   Bede le Venerableposted 5 years ago

   Miebakagh, congratulations on your article improvement- here are a few ways you can refine it. I would replace the word “keep-it” for “fitness” in your opening sentence. This sentence, “And so, it is necessary body stretching enthusiast eat the right kind of foods.” May be improved by like this, “And so, it is necessary that the exercise enthusiast eat the right kinds of food.”
   
   There are a few spots where the verbs need agreement. For instance in these subtitles: “Vegetables Builds Muscles and Bones,” the verb should be “Build.” “Avocado Fight Bone Disease,” the verb should be “Fights.” “Red Meat Enhanced Muscle Weight Gain,” the verb should be “Enhances.”
   
   Remember also to capitalize verbs in subtitles, even if they are three letters, such as “eat.”
   
   You’re getting very close my friend.

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    Miebakagh57posted 5 years ago

    Hello Bede, you are very much welcomed. You have been of much help since I published this hub. Okay, I am taking all your inputs into account. It is now all done. But I still need to go through the story to make some changes where necessary. Many thanks.

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