I'd like feedback on my article: Advantages and Disadvantages of Social Media

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   Abid Tagaposted 21 months ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   Hello to all esteemed members. I recently published an article titled "Advantages and Disadvantages of Social Media," but it did not meet the standards set for Hubpage feature articles.  Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Advantages and Disadvantages of Social Media

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      OldRosesposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      I just ran your first paragraph through a plagiarism checker and found that it is lifted from another article on the internet.
      
      HubPages does not accept plagiarized writing.  If you want to publish here, you must only submit original writing.

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         Abid Tagaposted 21 months agoin reply to this

         Thank you for your response. I wrote this article myself, but it's possible that the same content may exist on some other websites. I will make an effort to enhance it. Once again, thank you.

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      Miebakagh57posted 21 months agoin reply to this

      In the introduction alone, the phrase 'social media' appear 6 times. Near synanyms like social network, chat room, social community, would have beat and break monotony.                                That said, I don't read further because my interest waned. Thanks.

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         Abid Tagaposted 21 months agoin reply to this

         Thanks

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   psycheskinnerposted 21 months ago

   I think you need to add citations to claims like "Social media can cause depression and anxiety", you also reference specific studies without citing them.  The language seems more like what would be in a research article than a more accessible article.

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      Abid Tagaposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks

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   AliciaCposted 21 months ago

   I checked your references. The last two have a redirect problem and didn’t go to the source that you mentioned. I tried two different browsers on my tablet and my phone, and the results were the same.

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      Abid Tagaposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      Yes, the last two links are not working. I will delete these links and try to add them again. Thanks to all for their valuable feedback. My article has been featured.

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         Miebakagh57posted 21 months agoin reply to this

         Congratulations!

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            Abid Tagaposted 21 months agoin reply to this

            Thanks

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               Miebakagh57posted 21 months agoin reply to this

               You're always welcome.

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      Abid Tagaposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      I want to transfer my article to Owlcation. Could you please provide me with some crucial suggestions?

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         WriterJanisposted 21 months agoin reply to this

         Congrats on getting your article featured. Besides suggestions that others have made, I noticed you have a lot of white space in your article. I would clean that up. Also, while your photo references say Pexels, you really should include the person's name who is responsible for the image. Some of your paragraphs are really long. I would break them up more. I also suggest bulleted lists.

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            Abid Tagaposted 21 months agoin reply to this

            Thank you for your valuable feedback. I will take your advice into consideration and make the necessary adjustments.

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            Miebakagh57posted 21 months agoin reply to this

            A+

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