I'd like feedback on my article: London Landmarks and Architecture

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   Gloriousconfusionposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article London Landmarks and Architecture. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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   Natalie Frankposted 7 years ago

   Hi -
   At first glance I would say there are several things you can do to make the article stronger and more likely to pass QAP.  First, there are far too many topic headings and subtopic headings throughout.  You begin with a photo that has a heading which makes it seem like the next section will be on the topic of the heading but really isn't.  I would start with a general photo that would illustrate the entire article then use 2 or 3 more in the body to illustrate main topics. 
   
   The content is somewhat superficial with only a few sentences on each subtopic.  This also makes it seem choppy.  Again, choose several larger topics and subsume the subtopics under them without headings, introducing them or following them with a photo.
   
   One section needing serious revision is the one on the monument.  You have a heading which says see below which refers to a photo not content, then a subheading which apparently is intended to be your content then something that just says click on the link to learn more as follows:
   
   Monument (See Below)
   Monument, designed by Christopher Wren - now stands as a permanent memorial, where the fire started, not far from St Paul's Cathedral
   Click on the link to see more about Monument - a website devoted enirely to the Monument and Christopher Wren.
   
   Instead, find sources that give different interesting information about the monument and synthesize it into a section about the monument that presents it in a unique way.  Subheading shouldn't be used for the purposes of presenting content and should just indicate what the next section is about.
   
   Your Amazon capsule alone will likely keep it from passing QAP since the product has to be something you have personal experience with and which you added personal content about in the first person.  Instead, you have copied the book description and simply cut and pasted it in the capsule, which isn't allowed. The only part you added was the following:
   
   If you would like to read a bit more about Christopher Wren's wonderful architecture, you will find this book very useful.
   
   Then you say:
   
   This is the book description:
   
   Which you copy and paste directly from Amazon.
   
   Finally, proofread the article for spelling and grammar.  Hope this helps and the article is featured soon.

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      Gloriousconfusionposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks very much for your detailed advice - I appreciate the time you have spent on this, Natalie

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         Natalie Frankposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Happy to do it.  Hope it helps.  Good luck.

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   Beth Eaglescliffeposted 7 years ago

   Some of your photos are slightly out of focus, but they will probably pass QAP.
   However, you should find a better one to replace "View of Carey Street From The Back Entrance of the Royal Courts of Justice" as it is blurred and makes my eyes go funny.

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      Gloriousconfusionposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks, I'll have to look out for a better photo - that's the only one I have at present

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