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   Ekcedeonposted 6 years ago

   Good day everyone, I hope you are having a great day so far. I recently published an article and I know it has obvious errors but my eyes aren't seeing them. So I'm asking for your feedback, Thank you!

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      What article?
      
      If it hasn't passed the QAP, then you should have an email that gives you a special link to post here. I'm not 100% sure if it's working right now as people have been complaining that nothing happens when they click it.
      
      Try posting the normal link here and we'll see if that works.

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         Ekcedeonposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         I forget to post the link, https://hubpages.com/religion-philosoph … -the-bible

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      Ekcedeonposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      I initially forgot to post the link which is: https://hubpages.com/religion-philosoph … -the-bible

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      Miebakagh57posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Ekcedeon, like the older hubbers are asking: which article, where's the link? I would also ask you the same questions.
      Yes, your eyes including mine and others cannot see all errors at once. A software called Grammarly can do better. Go download it free at www.grammarly.com Hope this helps.

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   Rupert Taylorposted 6 years ago

   You need to provide a link to the article.

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      Ekcedeonposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      The link is: https://hubpages.com/religion-philosoph … -the-bible
      
      Thank you

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   Rupert Taylorposted 6 years ago

   There are several grammar and punctuation errors. I'll cover a few.
   
   Change of tense "He then turns to the donkey and said (should be says): "you must be a Christian!" his friend standing nearby asked (asks) him the reason for such a statement."
   
   "Naaman shows up at Elisha (possessive, should be Elisha's) front door, expecting Elisha to come out and greet him, but instead, the prophet sent Gehazi his servant to go tell Naaman to go (repetitive to go needs to be rephrased) dip himself seven times in the Jordan river (Proper noun should be River)."
   
   "a prophet's attention. "come (Capital letter follows period, or change to a comma) outside and touch me prophet Elisha, just don't send me in (wrong preposition should be to) that dirty Jordan river".
   
   There are many other issues. I suggest running your text through a program such as Grammarly or Hemingway.
   
   Also, the large blocks of type need to be broken up into smaller paragraphs.

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      Ekcedeonposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you, Rupert! Your feedback was very helpful. Hubbers like you make Hubpages worth my time.
      
      Blessings

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         Ekcedeonposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         There is so much more to learn

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