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   Shalon L Leonardposted 6 years ago

   Hello hubbers, i just published my second article and i would live some feedback and would like to know if it would qualify for a niche site
   https://hubpages.com/style/How-Caramel- … -your-Hair

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      That E'Tae product isn't made of caramel. It's called 'Carmel Deep Reconstruction Treatment'. There's no mention of caramel on the website. Caramel is made with pure sugar. There's nothing in the product ingredient list that would form caramel.

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         greenmindposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Well that's an honest mistake. You will need to do extensive rewriting. The good news as far as I'm concerned is that this is a well-written article and it shows that you have talent. Bounce back!

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         Shalon L Leonardposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Well i think that i mentioned that people has began to swap out Carmel for molasses. When i brought it in 2014 she was using caramel.

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         Shalon L Leonardposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         The recipe i listed doesn't have caramel, but when you look up what caramel does for your hair its a natural hair softener, but the recipe and Etae product does not use caramel

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            Marketing Meritposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            Why would you write an article about the benefits of caramel and then include a hair product that doesn't contain it? It doesn't seem logical Shalon. Is there another product you could reference instead? Alternatively, you could change the title to better reflect the article.
            Good luck!

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               Shalon L Leonardposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               Because thats the name of the treatment ,  there used to be plenty of recipes that used actual Carmel but i can't seem to find any now, they all have been replaced with molasses.

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                  theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  Okay, but your article needs to be accurate. Otherwise your readers will be confused. I couldn't find anything where anyone made actual caramel out of sugar and water, then applied it to their hair. So you could point out that the 'caramel' referred to is because of the color of the treatment and not an ingredient. Make sure you don't mix up the words 'caramel' and 'carmel'.

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                     Shalon L Leonardposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                     I've been totally confused by the spelling because when reading the homemade recipes the spell it caramel but the Etae   brand uses carmel

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                        theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                        Yes, and that is just a product name. There's no such ingredient as 'carmel'. It's not a proper word, it's mostly used as a place name or forename for a person. It seems as if the product creator changed the name of the treatment because it was misleading to call it 'caramel', when it didn't contain any. I'm not surprised you're confused. I would be too
                        
                        So I suggest using your current article as a basis for one about hair treatment, but delete any reference to caramel. Instead talk about 'store cupboard ingredients' or similar. You could make it into an even better article.

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                           Shalon L Leonardposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                           Ok thanks great suggestion

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                  Marketing Meritposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  Is it? I thought the name was Carmel, not caramel.
                  You are advocating the benefits of using caramel. If the companies are using molasses then your article should better reflect this Shalon.

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                     Shalon L Leonardposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                     Thank you, i have since adjusted it to read that although it's called the caramel treatment  the molasses is what gives it its Carmel color, should i also include Carmel in the recipe? Because when i first heard of it that's what people were using

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