I'd like feedback on my article: Being A Girl

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   Varsha Royposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Being A Girl (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Varsha,
      
      This is a very important issue and the more that is written and broadcast about it the better.
      
      I think you could make your article longer and perhaps add some real life examples to add punch to it.
      
      You've added the source of your image as the title of the article. That's incorrect. You must cite the actual source (such as Wikimedia Commons or whatever). Images must be correctly licensed and legal to use. You could try a site called Pixabay.
      
      This will help: https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … -image-use
      
      You need to explain more how 'investing in girls' is supposed to work. Is it through education? Healthcare? Just describe the possible solutions a bit more. For example, surely it's less about educating the girls (although that is important, of course) but about educating families? And from there, Indian society as a whole.
      
      You may have to remove the link. I know it's a charity, but remove it for now. You might be able to add it back later.
      
      Good luck.

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         Varsha Royposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         This is helpful. Thank you so much.

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   DrMark1961posted 6 years ago

   Hubpages is not going to accept copies of what is already out there. If you want to write an original article about your work and the kids you help that would be fine. A copy is not.
   http://www.plantoempower.org/donations/being-a-girl/

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      Varsha Royposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      The content of both the articles is different. They aren't same.

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   Natalie Frankposted 6 years ago

   While I agree that this is an important topic, the article is self promotional as it seem largely geared to get people to the the site for the organization you work for.  I am not sure if you wrote the article on the other site but even if you did you cannot take parts of it and publish it on HP - everything on HP must be published here first.  I think if you were to write an article on the topic that is new content and not exactly what the other article publishes it would be a useful piece that would be able to be published here.  You have a few problems with English usage but they can be corrected and some formatting problems that you can find information on at the learning center.  That's your first step-  the learning center has all kinds of information that will help you understand what's allowed and not allowed on HP, technical guidelines for publishing here and what HP expects in terms of the articles they publish.  Good luck.

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   Natalie Frankposted 6 years ago

   You still have entire paragraphs that are copied and the self promotional problem.  HP won't accept something that is essentially a very similar article with parts of it being copied from somewhere else, especially when it is self promotional in nature.  It looks like you are just trying to get traffic for the site you are linking to. It doesn't help that you list the link two separate times.  You need to get rid of the links and make it a completely different article.

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