I'd like feedback on my article: Book Vending Machine Encourages Kids to Read

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  1. Kelvin barrie profile image44
    Kelvin barrieposted 10 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? I don't think it's spammy? is it not strong enough content? some of the spelling is English spelling not American is that an issue? Is it not 'evergreen' enough? What can I do to improve? Thanks! PS. I will remove the Capsule subtitles as for the picture/video as I don;t think they work.


    Here is my article: Book Vending Machine Encourages Kids to Read (must be signed in to view)

  2. Rupert Taylor profile image96
    Rupert Taylorposted 10 months ago

    Sorry, but it's very spammy and won't pass QAP. You can't use HubPages to promote a product.

  3. Natalie Frank profile image94
    Natalie Frankposted 10 months ago

    You're in vending.  HP isn't a place to promote your business.

    1. theraggededge profile image97
      theraggededgeposted 10 months agoin reply to this

      Oh, so he is. Don't think he's anything to do with books though.

  4. theraggededge profile image97
    theraggededgeposted 10 months ago

    It's not promotional, is it? At least not the version I just read.

    The main problem is that it is too 'newsy'. HubPages wants articles that will stand the test of time. That doesn't mean you couldn't write about the topic, but it would be better if you broadened it to encompass other innovations to help encourage children to read.

    It's too short. And you should never refer to children by their full names. It's too easy to identify them. I didn't see the video as it's disabled, but presumably you got most of your content from it. Be careful with that. It could be construed as plagiarism.

    If you are writing about American issues on an American site, then it would be better to write with American spellings. I'm British, but I use US spellings in my articles. The exception is if you were writing from a British perspective... along the lines of 'look what they are doing in the US' sort of thing.

    Think about who your readers are. Who is this aimed at? Who will be searching for the information? If your article doesn't fulfil a need or answer a question, it's going to sink into the big black hole of the internet.

    Do some research on the platform, and how to write articles that people want to read.

    Click Help, top right of any page to visit the Learning Center. Lots of good info there.

  5. psycheskinner profile image85
    psycheskinnerposted 10 months ago

    He is in selling old vending machines as book dispensers--I would bet one of the two such businesses that was (in a previous version) linked at the end of the story.

  6. Kenna McHugh profile image90
    Kenna McHughposted 10 months ago

    You need to tone down your article and talk more about the importance of reading, not your product. I highly, highly suggest you read the guidelines.

  7. Kelvin barrie profile image44
    Kelvin barrieposted 10 months ago

    Hi Guys,

    Thank you all for your responses. For full disclosure I do run a vending machine business, and I am currently trying to create some creditability in the industry writing some articles that are related to vending machines. But I am new to this so I appreciate your help.

    I am trying to write something of quality without trying to sell a product directly, I thought maybe my last paragraph about mentioning companies that will offer it was subtle enough but i guess not so i'll ditch it. the links to the books I mention i have no affiliation with, I'm not signing up with any  earnings program on hubpages, so i'll get rid of them. (but still doesn't seem to bad compared to other articles i've seen, maybe if you link a amazon product its fine, but anything else is a no no?)

    Cheers particularly 'theraggededge' for the tips about the full names, and thinking about the target and content. The video was just 30sec of the using the machine, the article added to it rather than copied it, but good point, i'll keep that in mind for the future

  8. Kenna McHugh profile image90
    Kenna McHughposted 10 months ago

    Kelvin, Thanks for responding. You really should read the guidelines, too.

 
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