I'd like feedback on my article: The Introvert

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   Amrutha Balachandranposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: The Introvert

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Amrutha,
      
      I think you need a better title. Expand it a little so it reflects what people are searching for.
      
      Tip: take the word 'introvert'. Type it into the Google search box. Don't press Enter. Can you see other search suggestions? Those ones aren't particularly good (sometimes they are). Press Enter.
      
      Look at the section headed "People also ask:" There are some really good suggestions. That's what people are looking for.
      
      Now scroll to the bottom of the page. More suggestions right there. Now choose your title and, of course, you can customize it, but keep the main search phrase.
      
      Then edit your article a little to reflect the title you have chosen.
      
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      Content: remember that introversion is a personality type, not a phobia. Someone might have a phobia of social situation but that's not the same thing.
      
      "Egress" not the right word. You might mean 'dismiss' or 'overcome'.
      
      Remove the 'wink wink' phrase. It's unprofessional and I have no idea what you mean. Your title is not sugar-coated.
      
      Punctuation: spaces AFTER punctuation, never before. You need to learn this rule as it is a basic requirement.
      
      Remove all the exclamation marks. They shouldn't appear in an article unless you have actually used an exclamation, like Stop! or Help!
      
      The image: is it free from copyright? Remember, you can't use images that belong to other people unless you have established what license it is published under. If in doubt, stick with free image sites like Pixabay and Unsplash.
      
      The grammar needs checking. There are some hard-to-understand phrases, such as, "Now before you go all praises of my freshly googled introvert quotes let me tell you this , an introvert doesn’t need saving , but then again she needs to save herself."
      
      Try using Grammarly, though I don't think it's great at picking up everything.
      
      Lots of work to do here. Good luck.

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   Amrutha Balachandranposted 5 years ago

   Thank you

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