I'd like feedback on my article: integrated diet system

  1. Sipan Youssef profile image58
    Sipan Youssefposted 6 years ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
    Here is my article: integrated diet system (must be signed in to view)

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    1. Kierstin Gunsberg profile image70
      Kierstin Gunsbergposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Sipan, you'll need to fix a few things to improve your article:

      1. As Rupert says, your title needs to be APA and it also needs to be SEO friendly so a better title might be "Here's the Best Integrated Diet System if You Love Fruit" or something specific like that.

      2. Your article needs to be edited by someone who has a strong command of English.

      3. You should try breaking up the article into several paragraphs and points.

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  2. Rupert Taylor profile image76
    Rupert Taylorposted 6 years ago

    Your title needs to be in APA Title Face.

    You have chosen to write on a topic that is flooded with similar articles on the Internet. Your article is in competition thousands of others from authorities with great credibility.

    "A very important element in daily life is sports and physical activity through exercise every morning, saves us from many of the intractable diseases that kill our bodies from time to time, providing us with a sense of confidence and reducing the probability of our diseases And helps to get rid of insomnia, tension, depression and sleep disorders and help strengthen our muscles and improve blood circulation and blood flow in the body."

    This is a very long run-on sentence and needs to be broken into two or three. It's also important when making medical efficacy statements to cite authoritative sources.

    Large blocks of type are a turn off and need to be broken into smaller text capsules.

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