Suggestions for improving quality please

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   AshlyChristenposted 9 months ago

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      TIMETRAVELER2posted 9 months agoin reply to this

      You could start by explaining what a lactation cookie is.  I never heard of them and wasn't aware, until the end of the article, that they are for women having babies.  Also, forget the thumbnail photos.  Use regular sized images that show the progress in the cookie making.

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         AshlyChristenposted 9 months agoin reply to this

         Ok thank you great suggestions

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      OldRosesposted 9 months agoin reply to this

      In addition to the changes TT2 suggests, you need to indicate the source of  your photos.  They must be your own or Creative Commons licensed.  Anything else is illegal to use.
      
      Remove the Amazon capsule.  Hubpages discourages the use of amazon capsules and wants us to use text links instead.  You must also review the product, saying why you recommend use of it. 
      
      Remove the outbound link,  HubPages does not like authors to send readers off of HubPages.

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         AshlyChristenposted 9 months agoin reply to this

         Yes they are my own photos do I need to write I am the owner?
         & ok thank you will do

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            OldRosesposted 9 months agoin reply to this

            Yes, in the photo capsule you have indicate that it is your own photo.  When I have used my own photos I write "Author" as the source of the photo.

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      AliciaCposted 9 months agoin reply to this

      You should also proofread carefully to catch capitalization and punctuation errors.

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   Kenna McHughposted 9 months ago

   Ashly,  Your bio needs to be more direct. Where did you learn to cook or bake? Self-taught, mother? Also, I went through the first part of your article and offer theses suggested grammar and punctuation changes.
   **I had in my mind that I was going to make some healthy cookies for the family, so I also decided to make them lactation cookies. That's right, I am feeding my family lactation cookies, and that is okay because they support healthy digestion with all the added fiber and protein. They are satisfyingly delicious and not loaded with sugar. The added fruit, nuts, and peanut butter make them more filling. On the plus side, I can say they are mommies booby cookies and eat most of them myself to help give my milk a boost while breastfeeding our six-month-old, who has a very healthy appetite.
   So I go to the store to grab eggs and butter and realize there are no eggs and butter. The shelves at my local Walmart have been cleared of practically everything thanks to people panic shopping over the coronavirus outbreak of spring 2020. So instead of butter, I used plant butter made with almonds. Instead of eggs, I used a couple of bananas.**

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      AshlyChristenposted 9 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you So much I will make these changes! Sometimes I lack good grammar once my fingers get going away at the keyboard,

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         OldRosesposted 9 months agoin reply to this

         In that case, you need to proof-read your work.  I proof read everything I publish on HubPages three times.
         
         1.  Proof read my Word doc where I compose my article.
         
         2.  Proof read again when I copy and paste into the capsules on the site.
         
         3.  Proof read a final time using the preview function.
         
         I know that this sounds like overkill, but I find errors in spelling, grammar and syntax in each step.

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   AshlyChristenposted 9 months ago

   I have gone through the article again and made these improvements
   what do you think now
   Thank you for your time
   https://hubpages.com/food/Healthy-Prote … dairy-free

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