I'd like feedback on my article: Let the Pandemic Be Your Wake up Call Moment

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   Susan Shienfieldposted 4 years ago

   Hi Huber’s,
   
   I asked for feedback and I received it from theraggedege.  I’m not sure how to get in touch with her but hopefully she sees this post.  Her first suggestion was very helpful.  However I was shocked by the second which alerted me that the powers that decide had removed the most important part of the story which was to remove the free guided meditation with instructions on how to get the most out of it.  I’m not sure who thought I was selling anything.  I am a retired stress therapist who came back to the work world to volunteer my gifts in these stressful times.  If you are not interested in my offering to help people then the story alone is useless as stated by theraggedege. 
   Here is my article: Let the Pandemic Be Your Wake up Call Moment (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Susan,
      
      Your article does not mention 'free guided meditation'. You encourage people to contact you via your email address. This is not permitted by HubPages as it is considered promotional. It does appear that you are trying to promote a business. Read it again as if you were a visitor to the page.
      
      Or are you saying that you originally included a section with the meditation and it's been cut by the editors?
      
      Why don't you write out the meditation and include it in the text? Or, if you have a video, upload it to YouTube and then you can put it into the article.
      
      Articles have to stand alone and include *all* the necessary information. They shouldn't have to rely on an outside source, so unless you include the information you are offering, it won't be of any use to your reader.
      
      You will have to remove your email address. None of us are allowed to put contact details into an article, only on our profiles.
      
      Again, I suggest you do some research on HubPages at the Learning Center, click Help, top right.
      
      Good luck.

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      PT Richardposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      I think it would help if you wrote a section about the parts of a cell and what they do (ribosomes, cytoplasm, etc -- basic high school stuff). Then you could pin-point the parts of the cell that your therapy changes. This would include the parts of the cell where negative energy has been shown to reside, and the mechanism by which your therapy removes it. HubPages favors writers who can supply references/studies etc to support health-related articles.

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