I'd like feedback on my article: Healthy lifestyle while ageing

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  1. Debbie kings profile image70
    Debbie kingsposted 4 years ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
    Here is my article: Healthy lifestyle while ageing (must be signed in to view)

    1. OldRoses profile image94
      OldRosesposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      You should have a native speaker of English review your article and help you correct the language errors.  HubPages is an American site and will only publish articles that are written in perfect English.

      You make a lot of medical claims in your article.  You need to cite the sources of your information since you are not a medical professional.

    2. peachpurple profile image82
      peachpurpleposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      most of the paragraphs are too long to read and cramp up.

      try to break them to smaller paragraphs for each sub titles

  2. AliciaC profile image91
    AliciaCposted 4 years ago

    Hi. One problem is the language errors in the article. Another is the lack of a space after some of the commas. You need to remember to start a sentence with a capital letter.

    Your choice of words is sometimes incorrect. We should use “you” instead of “u” in our articles, for example. In the first entry in the “Try” column of the table, I think you mean “bother” instead of “border”.

    You should clarify the section in which you say that at the age of 25 our body can no longer break down some foods and stores them in certain places in the body and in gas.

    Titles and subtitles should be written in APA title case.

    Although you are a microbiologist, I think you should add authoritative references to your articles about health.

 
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