I'd like feedback on my article: How to apply Yin Yang in life

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   ngcheokheongposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: How to apply Yin Yang in life (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      Your article is very hard to read because you haven't broken the first part into proper paragraphs. Remember that people are reading on mobile devices -- I would go cross-eyed if I were trying to read it on my phone.
      
      A paragraph is a collection of sentences pertaining to a single idea or point. A paragraph can be one sentence or several, but it should be no more than about five or six.
      
      It's missing an introduction. Your title is How to Apply Yin Yang in Life but nowhere in that huge first paragraph do you mention Yin Yang.
      
      I've skimmed through the text but I can't find out how I would apply Yin Yang in my daily life. So what use is it to the average western reader? For example, today I have an article to finish and publish. I will be walking my dogs, doing some cleaning, laundry, cook for my family, watch a bit of TV, read, maybe do some research later. How can I apply your advice to my day?
      
      And what if I don't have a handy copy of the I Ching?
      
      See if you can improve it. Good luck.

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   ngcheokheongposted 5 years ago

   Thanks for your kind and valuable feedback.  I will follow your advices and amend the article.

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   Robie Benveposted 5 years ago

   I see that you changed to title to reflect the I Ching content, I think that was a good move.
   I just skimmed through the text, so I don't have a good feedback as far as content, but I just wanted to suggest that you:
   1. break the text into several text boxes
   2. use the title area of each text box for Properly Capitalized Subtitles that explain what's in the next few sentences.
   3. Use the H2 or H3 blue text within the text box when you want to highlight something, this is to replace the underlined words. (To do that, you select the words and then change from "paragraph" to "Heading 2" or "Heading 3")
   Good luck

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   ngcheokheongposted 5 years ago

   Thanks for your advices.  Very much appreciated.  Will follow.

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