I would like feedback for my article : 10 Most Beautiful Hotels in Ind

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   Swaty Garodiaposted 5 years ago

   Hello Hubbers,
   
   Please guide me on the below article for QAP.
   
   Article: http://hub.me/anA0f
   
   Thanks
   Swaty

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   theraggededgeposted 5 years ago

   Hello Swaty,
   
   There are some English problems. I don't really understand the first sentence. Is it addressed to people travelling outside of India, i.e. Indian people? Or to people coming into India?
   
   "I have seen many individuals traveling outside India and was astonished to perceive how fewer Indians have discovered it yet."
   
   What is 'it'?
   
   Remove the exclamation points from the subtitle. Try to avoid them, in a non-fiction piece, if possible.
   
   You have some unnecessary capitalization going on, so look up the rules for using capital letters in sentences.
   
   Some of the text (where there are no grammatical errors) appears to be from other sites. The wording is so close that the article has probably triggered the duplicate content filter.
   
   In the section on the The Udaivilas, Udaipur (which doesn't appear to be the name of the hotel) you mention 'chasing grounds'. Do you mean 'hunting'?
   
   You have taken photos from other websites. This is not permitted unless they have given you permission to use them. If you have contacted each site and received written/email permission, then that's fine. If you have not, then you should substitute with different ones. Usually the hotels themselves are okay for you to use theirs, but you must check.
   
   You are going to have to work hard on this one to get it featured. So my advice is to have someone help with the proofreading and then look for a legal source of photos.
   
   Good luck.

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   Eurofileposted 5 years ago

   The raggededge gives good advice, which you would do well to follow.
   In addition I would suggest moving the combination photo (if you have permission to use it) to the top of the article. After your introduction I would add an index with each place numbered 1-10 so that readers can skip to any that they have a particular interest in. Ensure that your headings are numbered to correspond to the index.
   I would definitely delete exclamation marks and replace with a full stop.

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   Swaty Garodiaposted 5 years ago

   Thank you so much, Beverly and Liz, for the valuable feedback on my article. I will surely rework on it.
   Request you help me in proofreading the article before I republish it again.

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