I'd like feedback on my article: Challenging Unforgiveness: A Positive Mindset..

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   kmurr7posted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Challenging Unforgiveness: A Positive Mindset in the Times of Covid-19 (must be signed in to view)

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      OldRosesposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      This is a blog post.  HubPages is not a blogging platform.  If you want to create a blog, try Blogger or WordPress, both ae free.  Hubpages publishes magazine style articles of 1,000 words.  Spend some time reviewing the articles in the Learning Center (help button, upper right).  They will tell you everything you need to know to properly write and format articles for HubPages.

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      The main problem with your article is that it is not written to the title. Nowhere in the text do you mention Covid-19, so why is it in the title? If you don't deliver what you promise in your headline, your article might be seen as clickbait. So sort that out. Do you want it based on C-19, or not?
      
      The main thrust of the article is fairly standard, however, you need to include concrete examples otherwise it comes over as a bit 'waffly'. You don't explain how to forgive. Use real-life examples to explain the points you are making. It makes a huge difference if you can show your readers your message.
      
      Trinidad suddenly pops into the text with no context. Perhaps you need to be clear why it's important. Remember that HubPages is mainly a US site.
      
      You've missed the main advantage of learning to forgive - well you kind of mention it in the conclusion but in a negative way; the ill effects of not forgiving. It would so much better if you ended it on a positive, uplifting note, rather than on the ills that will befall an 'unforgiver'. The main advantage of forgiving is freedom. Interestingly, your image shows this clearly, but you don't mention it.
      
      Talking of images, make sure it is legal to use and that you cite and link to the source. Images should carry a Creative Commons license.
      
      I would question your use of the word 'offend'. As in offended rather than victimized. I can see the logic, and I hate the 'v' word myself. However, people choose to be offended. And we can choose to drop the feeling of 'offended-ness' as easily as we can blink. Most of our need to forgive stems from pain or other emotional disruption. In other words, it's not something we choose.
      
      You mention studies, so make sure to link to them at the end of the article. Important to have references in a piece such as this.
      
      Make sure your subtitles are in APA format - they are mixed at the moment. This little site is useful: https://capitalizemytitle.com/
      
      This is well-written and I'm sure with a little work you can get it through QAP and on to a network site.
      
      Good luck and I look forward to reading more of your work.

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         kmurr7posted 5 years agoin reply to this

         As a first-timer, I appreciate this feedback so much!
         
         Now that I know what to look for, I will work on the changes you suggested.

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