I'd like feedback on my article: Do You Know The Amendments of The Constitution.

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   Rwritingsposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Do You Know The Amendments of The Constitution and Should You Care, Part 4

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      Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

      I am sorry I am not a citizen of the USA. Nor am I well familias with her constitution.

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      OldRosesposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      I would suggest breaking this up into at least two articles.  As written, it is way too long.  Most people reading articles on this platform are reading them on their phones.  If an article is too long or the paragraphs too dense, they will click away rather than finish reading.

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         Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Oldrose, long or short, it matters to sone.

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         Rwritingsposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you Old Rose for your advice.  I really appreciate it.

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   AliciaCposted 4 years ago

   The first thing I would suggest is to make your article easier to read. In some places, I was confused about whether you were quoting someone or giving your own commentary. Using different capsules with subtitles would clarify the situation and also make the article look more attractive.
   
   Your article contains a lot of quotes that are found on other sites (one in particular), which reduces the amount of original text in the article. This could be a problem. The excessive amount of bold text could also be a problem. In addition, some of your paragraphs are very long. If you can break them up, it would be good to do so.
   
   The photo should be full width. You should include the source and license in order to show that the photo can be used in your article.

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      Rwritingsposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you Alicia C for your advice. I really appreciate it. I will shorten the quotes and figure out how to put them in capsules.   I will also cut down on the bold font and break up the paragraphs.     In regards to the photo it is free for public use, however, I will double check.  Once again, thank you for your advice.

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   Kenna McHughposted 4 years ago

   A bio might help, but the trouble is the format needs work. The constitution is a tough document to read. It's not for the lighthearted readers or learners. With that, Linda's suggestions are the way to go.

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      Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there, and @linda & @kenna like as I said earlier, I am not familiar with the USA Constitution.                   Agreed it is "a tough document." I also agreed to their suggestions for you to make the changes. Thanks.

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      Rwritingsposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Kenna,
      Thanks for your advice.  I have my work cut out for me.

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