I'd like feedback on my article: Laser Acupuncture

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   Haseeb Fazliposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   
   Also, if you guys could give me your personal rating for it that would be helpful as well! Thanks so much in advance !
   Here is my article: Laser Acupuncture (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      I suggest that you visit the Learning Center, click Help, top right, to navigate there. You can find information about what HubPages requires, how to format an article, create a good title, and how to add legal images.
      
      Good luck.

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      Drew Agravanteposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Haseeb!
      
      Here are my suggestions.
      
      1. Study the writing platform first especially how to use it. It will help you a lot so that you could improve.
      
      2. Create a bio to at least show if you know what your writing.
      
      3. Needs major improvement in structure. You can use the Help button to learn more and improve your writing.
      
      Hope this helps ^^.

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   AliciaCposted 5 years ago

   Theraggededge has offered you some good advice. I have some more suggestions.
   
   First, why are you qualified to make the health claims in your article? Your profile says that you have a degree in creative writing. How can you say that laser acupuncture is safer than the usual type, that it alleviates the pain associated with specific conditions, that it helps some conditions immensely, and that it has few or no negative effects? What qualifications do you have or what experience have you had with the technique? Where are the authoritative references supporting your claims?
   
   I'm not saying that laser acupuncture has no benefits. What I am saying is that you need to provide evidence that it does instead of simply stating that it's beneficial. Writers need to be very careful when making health claims in an article, especially if they aren't medical practitioners. This is why references from reliable sources are very important.
   
   If you have relevant qualifications or experience, you need to add this information to your profile and bio. (You should have a bio related to the topic at the top of each article.)
   
   Good luck.

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