I'd like feedback on my article: Cake Trends -2020

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   BrandCaiposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   1. What exactly should the changes be made in the article as per your standards?
   
   2. should the topic be changed or the title of the article?
   
   thanks
   Here is my article: Cake Trends -2020 (must be signed in to view)

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      Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi, our standard right here is the HubPages magazine writing style. So I agreed with the theraggedged's submissions. Thank you.

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         BrandCaiposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         thank you

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      erorantesposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hello, I like your cakes. They are beautiful designed. I was reading the last paragraph. You need to have someone proofread your article. Then, you need to edit and fix the grammar mistakes. I see it because I am only reading the article.

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   theraggededgeposted 4 years ago

   Hi there,
   
   There are a lot of changes needed to get this approved and eventually moved to a network site. However, this is a great topic and you can make this a fabulous article with some work.
   
   'Cake' only needs to be capitalised at the beginning of a sentence.
   
   Cut back on unnecessary words. For example, which is better?
   
   "Without a cake the celebration is generally considered as incomplete."
   
   or
   
   "No celebration is complete without a cake."
   
   More words does not equal better writing. In fact, the opposite is true. Your first paragraph repeats the same concept; cake is trending, over and over. Then the second paragraph does it again. Say what you need to say in a couple of simple sentences, then move on.
   
   You've used the word 'trend/trending' 24 times and the word 'cake' 72 times. That is called keyword stuffing. And indicates your propensity for repetition.
   
   Look at instances where you have used excessive passive voice, "This trend is being seen." "These cakes can be recognized..." Research the difference between active and passive voice.
   
   Cut back on exclamation marks. They look a bit unprofessional.
   
   All images should be cited, i.e. credit the source, link back to the original, and be legal, i.e. they must carry a Creative Commons license. You cannot ever just take them from any old site on the internet. Images are copyrighted as is text. One of your images is fuzzy and not up to the required standard.
   
   https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … -image-use
   
   I'll stop there, but there are more issues to be addressed, such improvements in grammar, sentence structure, etc.
   
   More help here: https://hubpageshelp.com/
   
   Good luck.

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      BrandCaiposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the suggestions,very helpful,Will make the changes

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         Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Chef, you comment: "Thank you for the suggestions, (V)ery helpful, (W)ill make the changes." The letters in brackets should be small letters v and w with a space after the comma.  A sentence always began with a capital letter. As yours and my above sentense. And the phrase that follows. Are you noting well? When it is a common word, it can be capitalized in the middle or end of the sentense like: "Good morning, John." or We should send for John and Mary to grace our dinner." Thanks.

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   Kenna McHughposted 4 years ago

   This article has potential but needs a lot of editing.
   For example, the title needs to be evergreen without the dash (-).
   One of your photos has your company's logo, and that is promoting your company in the article which is not permitted.
   There are other issues and I recommend studying guidelines here: https://hubpageshelp.com/standards/HubP … tyle-Guide

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