I'd like feedback on my article: Practices That Will Make You a Better Person

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   Nyams josephineposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Practices That Will Make You a Better Person

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      Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Nyams, I agreed with innerspin, that you go over your article and correct all the grammartical mistakes. It seems that you type then copy and paste the whole article into a single capsule...         The article should be organized according to hubpages  APA rendering. The opening paragraphy is the introduction. The listed topical headings 1-7 should all go into separate capsule.           Besides, the conclusion and the references should come last respfctively in their own capsule. List the books with authors name under the reference.       One photo capsule before the introduction, under the summary for SEO.                               On your timeline or page, click HELP and migrate the learning center. Learn more. Gla you do. Thanks

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         theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Miebakagh, you can activate a spell checker in your browser to prevent misspellings and typos. Don't press the space bar multiple times, instead press Enter twice for a new paragraph.
         
         You need to do this because your advice is very difficult to understand. I can't understand it, so new people must find it even more confusing.

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            Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

            Bev, I know the issue is the paragraph. I use an ordinary TECNO phone to work and post all my comments.

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               Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

               Some months ago, I had lost my 12-inch Widows laptop, kodak M522 camera, and smart phone to theives.

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                  Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                  I type my articles only on a desktop at an internet cafe, but post comments with the phone to save money.

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                     Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                     Bev, each post so far, is a paragraph. I think this last could be an exception.                        This is because if a word or two is omit in a sentence, re-inserting  the words to clarify meaning break or distort the paragraph.

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                     Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                     Bev, I had a second second laptop. The challenge is the mother board. I am negotiating with my ISP who had contact a vendor at China.                              Thank you, Bev, for pointing out the flaws, and for understanding.

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         Nyams josephineposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Thankyou for the advice, I will implement it for sure.

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            Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

            Nyams, okay. Good success.

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      Drew Agravanteposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi! Here are my suggestions
      1. Create a nice bio for your profile to show a bit that you know what your writing for.
      
      2. Add a few more pictures relevant to your subtitles or topic. Don't forget to credit the source. It's a nice etiquette.
      
      3. Add nice interesting poll or quizzes to make your content more engaging.
      
      Hope this help! ^^

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         Nyams josephineposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Yes it is helpful, thank you for the feedback

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            Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

            Nyams, again I click on the link to see if you've make helpful changes. 404 result! It must be a read later!

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               Nyams josephineposted 4 years agoin reply to this

               Hi, I made some changes to the article. Please check later. I would appreciate your feedback

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                  Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                  Nyams, happy for you! Good success.

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   innerspinposted 4 years ago

   Hi there, this will not be an in depth review, which takes a lot of time. You do need more work on this article.
   
   You need to find more information, and add a unique angle.
   
   You mention self help books, then name four books. One book is mentioned twice, one book has no author detailed. Why are these books singled out? Have they helped you?
   
   " ie"  means "that is." You may mean "eg" which stands for, "for example."
   
   "cut off weight," makes no sense. You probably mean, " lose weight."
   
   "Be an early riser." How is this better than staying up late? Some people are more productive late at night. You need to explain your statements.
   
   "The reading speed for most of these people is 200-250 words on average." Makes no sense. Words per minute?
   
   Hobbies do not begin with capital letters. So Dancing is dancing, Chess is chess, Wine tasting is wine tasting..
   
   You have some good ideas, but need much more in depth, well explained information.

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   Nyams josephineposted 4 years ago

   Thanks a lot. I appreciate the feedback, i will work on it.

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   Miebakagh57posted 4 years ago

   Bev, each post so far is a paragraph.                   I think this last could be an exemption.                 The reason is if at least two words are omited in a sentence, re-inserting the words to clarify the sentence distort the paragraph.

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