Feedback on my article

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   Alessio Ganciposted 2 years ago

   Hello there
   I have written in the past an article about Chinese food I would like to submit to Delishably: https://discover.hubpages.com/food/Chin … es-To-Food
   
   Despite the article being perfect according to Grammarly, an editor suggested me that the articles still has lots of grammar errors (Grammarly is not perfect of course, and while it helps me a lot when writing in English, it cannot still do the job like a human).
   
   Any suggestion about how I could improve grammar of my article, even on some sections (being the article quite long) would be appreciated.
   Thanks in advance

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      Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there, your article is a good read. The problem is that you don't formatted it well according to hubpages standard.                                           For example, the write should have a summary, follow by an introduction, the body, a conclusion, and a list of references.                                                Therefore, it's better you go to the learning center to learn all the basic tricks. If you click 'feed' on your time line you're done. Good success to you.

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         Alessio Ganciposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for your feedback. Will go read again that page, as I may have certainly missed some things the first time. Surely I realize I have completely forgot about references, as most of the things inside the article come from my personal experience and have not thought about them. Will go find some good sources and in the meantime, wait for suggestions about grammar improvement, as the editor of HP advised me to carefully check it.
         Thanks again

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   psycheskinnerposted 2 years ago

   There is a limit to what Grammarly can do.  For example, below is your first paragraph, as it is and how I would edit it for Hubpages.
   
   Chinese food got a worldwide success. Restaurants open everywhere, from the big cities to the small towns, and the trend never stops. People love to taste dim sum and all the other Asian delicacies. Still, how much do you know about Chinese food? This article will list some facts about one of the most appreciated cuisines in the world.
   
   Chinese food has achieved worldwide success. Restaurants have opened everywhere, from the big cities to the smallest of towns. People love to eat dim sum and all the other Asian delicacies that they have become familiar with, but how much do we really know about Chinese food? This article will list some interesting facts about one of the most appreciated cuisines in the world.

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   theraggededgeposted 2 years ago

   There are some awkward sentences which may have evaded Grammarly. For example, your very first sentence, "Chinese food got a worldwide success." Wouldn't it be better as, "People enjoy Chinese food all over the world."? Although that's rather bland.
   
   Think about catching the reader's attention... "I bet, like me, you love Chinese food." Do your best to avoid blah blah writing.
   
   Try the style editor, Hemingway--it's also free.

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   Alessio Ganciposted 2 years ago

   Thanks everyone for your suggestions. It seems I have to read each sentence and rewrite all those that sound a little weird. it's clear I have put too much into Grammarly, but while it is a great tool, it's not perfect. Will try that Hemingway tool and see.
   Thanks again

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