could anyone take a look at my hub on maternity leave etc...

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   saltposted 15 years ago

   its a bit sarconic... but it does have some substance to it, or so I think....

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   saltposted 15 years ago

   the link
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Middleclassmate … icFeminist

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   Marisa Wrightposted 15 years ago

   Hi Salt, I think it could do with some thorough editing.  There's some good discussion in there but it's a bit stream-of-consciousness right now, and a bit hard to follow.
   
   Especially remembering that most of your audience is going to be Americans,and you're describing a way of life that's quite different to theirs. 
   
   I think the biggest problem is your first paragraph - I had to read it three times before I worked out whether you were the worn-out one or she was.

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   saltposted 15 years ago

   thankyou, i agree, but I decided to keep it australian, the comments for editing are fantastic and I will work on them.

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      Marisa Wrightposted 15 years agoin reply to this

      I know what you mean.  I was once asked to write a Hub about work legislation and I decided not to, because I could write about the Aussie rules easily, but there was too much risk that I'd get the American side of it all wrong, even if I did my research.

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         blondepoetposted 15 years agoin reply to this

         I have become a little American in some of my words. When using the spell check on my hub a lot of my words even though spelled correctly in Australia come up as wrong lol.
         For example colour - color
                     realise - realize
                     honour - honor.

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            mistyhorizon2003posted 15 years agoin reply to this

            I have this problem too, so often my spellings may be American if I simply accept the spellcheck choice as opposed to ignoring it, although I don't always do this, (just to confuse people LOL).

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               blondepoetposted 15 years agoin reply to this

               Same here Misty I go with the flow

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               saltposted 15 years agoin reply to this

               I like sticking with the australian - as thats my lingo. I suppose I drift between the 2, but when I am consciously choosing, I choose the australian version, partly because I am australian.

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         saltposted 15 years agoin reply to this

         industrial legislation changes so much between states too, as I studied in WA and the legislation in Vic is different due to passing rights to federal in early 90s, newsouth wales is different again as is queensland... and south australia, looks like its different again.

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   shazwellynposted 15 years ago

   You might find it helpful to add some more breaks in the paragraphs or a few more pictures - make it easier on the eye.
   
   Also... at tip:  Want the copyright symbol?  If you go to one of my hubs, scroll to the bottom - copy and paste it.  (thanks to ryankett for original source)

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