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Constructive criticism wanted

  1. Elysianphoenix profile image89
    Elysianphoenixposted 6 years ago

    Hello everyone, I'm a new Hubber.

    I have composed some articles on budgies, mostly based on my own experience and knowledge, but I'm not a native English speaker. So, I would love it if I could get some reviews on the hubs I wrote, whether I used any odd sentences, and if it's at all what you would expect of the hub. Any other things you would notice or think are important are ofcourse welcome too!

    Thank you in advance!

    http://hubpages.com/hub/Budgies-Mixing- … er-Species

    1. kschang profile image87
      kschangposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Checked the "Getting a Budgie What You need" hub.

      Good hub, a couple suggestions

      1) More pictures. Each part you mention should have a matching picture of the stuff you already have, preferably WITH your budgie on it / in it / around it.

      2) A little conclusion in the end would be nice.

      3) Organize this into a series / group, in a specific order.

  2. PaulaHenry1 profile image78
    PaulaHenry1posted 6 years ago

    I read how to make the 2 get along....sorry I cannot remember the title while I type this...
    1. I think it is awesome and nicely written.
    2. I would paragraph or 'text box' more of the info then breaking it up every few seconds with a new title.

    Great start...!
    I'll be looking for more to read!

  3. Dame Scribe profile image60
    Dame Scribeposted 6 years ago

    I read the 'Is it a Boy or Girl'. I thought it was well done smile I recommend you keep a thesaurus and dictionary nearby when writing if unsure with spelling or want to use other words. Great writing and keep it up! big_smile